Fifty Seven Fifty

About 1 pence

That's how much this shit story is worth

Didn't see the twist,

I thought they might hook up again but I didn't think they had conspired from the beginning. A bit long winded, if you wanted Tim to come across as an indecisive Hugh Grant type character you succeeded but I'm not a Hugh Grant fan. Still it's worth 3*

Just the first half page was so long winded I couldn't read further due to boredom.

Fun Story

Thoroughly enjoyed it! Although some previous comments complain that the content was too long-winded, I see it as fitting for the main characters narratives seeing as they are both non-American academics with college positions. Love the unexpected denouement where we discover the true nature of Candy/Anabel's relationship with Tim. Looking fwd to seeing more writing from you.

Good story...but...

Good story...but why was he so nervous to confess to his wife, if he knew it was she who had planned all that night? And above all, if his female friend was just a friend why risc his marriage with the woman he loved so much? And if she really loved her traumatized cousin why risc to make her unhappy again?

Nice try, but No.

In your effort to make the sex scenes clever or erotic your word usage simply made them feel strained. Did you have a thesaurus sitting next to you? His troubles at his stag were laughable. Most men that drunk don't even manage an erection. And the "Pink cuffs". They're toys. A man in his physical condition would have ripped the cheap stitching apart in no time at all. And the condoms and lipstick wouldn't have fooled anyone. A drunk guy getting it up 5 times? Don't make me laugh. So that whole scene felt contrived and simply didn't work. And you lost the entire story when you had his new wife reveal that she set him up. Not a good way to start a marriage - the wife not trusting him and setting up a "test" of his fidelity and the lying scumbag husband cheating from the get go. I think he either left her and filed for an annulment or one of the guys told Jessica (because of course, drunk guys peeked into the room) about hubby really screwing Candy and she filed for an annulment. In any case neither character was worth a damn. In the end this story simply wasn't clever or entertaining. No stars.

Boring

Boring boring boring!! Get to the point.

Fatal Flaw

IMPO# hit the nail on the head. When an author has a character tell part (or all) of the story - First Person point-of-view (PoV) - the thoughts of that narrator are absolutely inviolate ... they are TRUE! The narrator may fib in a conversation with another character, but when they think to themselves, it IS what they think. Awkward. Hubby had NO reason to be nervous about his 'confession!'

I know it's just a story, but.....

the ending enraged me. What scumbags Tim and Annabel turned out to be! The depth of their betrayals of Jess is way more than I can stomach. For me, that ruined an otherwise fine story.

Not plausible but an enjoyable story. 4 stars.

You almost have to be envious of a man with a beautiful talented wife and a younger and perhaps prettier girl on the side for some extra-marital sex. However, he needs to be extra careful so that his wife is never the wiser.

Delightful little story.

I don't think I turned down many chances back when I was "of a certain age" and some of those which I did turn down I later regretted. Get a grip, you sober people, it is just a story.

WHEN YOU HANG WITH STRANGERS

make sure they are strangers to both sides. TK U MLJ LV NV

He/She Said it All

I second Bd4554. Tim and Annabel are scumbags. When Jessica finds out it will kill her. Hope she takes them with her. 1 star because of the ending.

Tim and Annabel are SCUMBAGS!!!

I third the sentiment. Jessica deserves so much better When she finds out, and cheating male or female whores are almost always found out, she should ruin them both. Their families should know everything. They deserve a slow painful death. One star because I cannot give less.

Boring

No need to spend mote words on this crap

loved it gave it a big 5

just to help offset the 1 or no vote!!

Thanks***

For the read.

What's the Big Deal,People?!

Such an angry reaction to Tim having a running relationship with Annabelle/Candy! What you'll find out in the sequel is that Jess IS Annabelle/Candy! And Tim's pet name for her when they're thumping the mattress is Sybil
In this chapter all three of the girls get drilled by the psychiatrist,and Tim fulfills his fantasy of having a fourway with his wife.

a dead whore

is a blessing from god, and the start of many a good joke. This cunt needs to die.

Market Economy

Why do you want the death of the slut wives? A slut ex wife helps to keep the fees of the prostitutes and escort girls in lower level. If the slut wives die the fees of the sex workers will increase!

he did not confess to his 'soul mate' .....

..... he confessed to us,readers, that he is nothing more than a cheating asshole .
I just feel sorry for poor Jessie. She, somehow, seems to be destined to end up with scumbags, always.
The end totally ruined it for me.
Also, the 'being nervous' part was a plothole even bigger than the hole in Tim's character.

Poor Jessica

She really seems to have shit luck with men.

And what a "delightful" shitstain of a cousin.

David Oliver

If American David Oliver reads this he'll be pissed. He was the actual 2008 Olympic Bronze Medalist in the high hurdles.

wow

what a bunch of assholes.