All Comments on 'Doctor, Doctor, Give Me A "Clue"'

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bearsladybearsladyover 9 years ago

This is awesome! Laughed my way through it. My partner firmly believes if we're going to be doing something new, he's going to be doing it on himself first. Total sweetheart and he earns extra points for it.

A well written, funny lesson learned story.

fanfarefanfareover 9 years ago
Finally! Some Honesty!

Who knew it is possible on this Site?

Ignorance Plus Ignorance always results in a quantum leap of ignorant acts!

AnonymousAnonymousover 9 years ago
ok....

glad I pushed through...this was hard for me to get through since S&M/BDSM is not my kink, but the story was good. Would have been better without the references to scoring etc...but that's just my personal opinion. I read to escape and being jarred back kinda defeats the function for me. Again, the story was good for the most part.

Apple_of_EdenApple_of_Edenover 9 years agoAuthor
OMG!!! There is always ONE isn't there? 25 Spanks for "Anonymous: ok"

To those of you who enjoyed a laugh, I'm glad you liked it. Thank you!

To: "Anonymous: ok" I wish you were here so I could put you over my knee or any other object and "pink" your ass! NOT for your pleasure, but for mine!! If you don't like BDSM or if it's not your "kink" why read the story? Didn't you read the line where I told you to "click your mouse" or "turn the page" etc.. I was trying to protect you. Also, you are getting 25 spanks, (I think that's what you referred to as "scoring"??) because you FAILED to follow directions twice! I specifically said, I do NOT want you to comment! Now, I've decided to make it 50, because you also disappointed me! Get over here! Now! Drop'em, bend over and grab those ankles!

AnonymousAnonymousover 9 years ago
You thought this was funny?

There were a couple of places where the attempt at humor was obvious. But for the most part this was just silliness with such horrible dialogue that it was difficult to read. And I know you were trying to be funny, but you just failed miserably. UGH!

betrayedbylovebetrayedbyloveover 9 years ago
Oh Yeah

You're a sick man. Good for you. Keep it up. By the way, did pass by you guys in the hospital? I was in a Philly ER myself. Probably, You don't see many caning incidents in Philly.

HA

Five Stars

tazz317tazz317over 9 years ago
OH BOY......LOOK AT THIS

getting toys when its not Xmas or a B'Day. TK U MLJ LV NV

NthusiasticallyNthusiasticallyover 9 years ago
Very Entertaining . . .

as well as instructive! I wish the nurse was my neighbor.

AnonymousAnonymousover 9 years ago
adorable

I thought it was written in a very entertaining manner. I don't usually finish reading stories, but i read every word of this obe

desertslavedesertslaveover 9 years ago
Good read!

Funny AND spot on in the right places!

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 9 years ago
Really funny!

Parody in excellence! I thought it was great! Laughed several times...really, Dr. Seuss! that alone was historically funny! Thanks, I needed a laugh.

JudyLeeJudyLeeover 8 years ago
Amusing.

I am not in the lifestyle. I have only recently been reading BDSM stories on line. (I have also read the 50 Shades series.) I must say that you have made more sense than many of the authors I've read. I have to agree with the concept that one could get really hurt by not knowing the ropes. (Pardon the pun.) Thanks for a very entertaining story. Judy Lee

KingCuddleKingCuddlealmost 7 years ago
Retrogressing, are we?

I'm already on record with you, suggesting a proofreader.

Make that an EDITOR!!! WITH A CHAINSAW!!!

This is like a stream-of-consciousness podcast by a drunken hyperactive

13-year-old.

Now that you've paused your initial storyteller clustering,

Find a new best friend who knows what Funny is.

And how to organize a narrative line.

And how to not bury a cute premise in asides, tangents, sidebars,

whimsies, top-of-the-head notions, and wannabe cleverness.

A helpful beginning will be a style guide. AP is the most widely used.

The NY TImes version is greyer. Not better.

Happy Chopping!!!

In time, you may be able to elevate this mess to a First Draft.

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