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by Anonymous10/18/14

Nice, but....

A nice story but spoiled by a few mistakes, or perhaps things you just overlooked.

" The black dress that hugs her slender body extenuating every curve"

"On the way home she doses off "

I think you did not mean "extenuating" or "doses" . Check your dictionary. Then re-read with a critical eye and correct the few other errors. Show a bit of pride in your writing, and it will pay off.

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