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by dpattjr4210/22/14

not a bad little story

it was hot, the idea was but it was very rushed and full of grammatical errors. quite distracting at times. i would recommend getting a proofreader and also taking your time building the story and characters. it has potential.

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by Anonymous10/25/14

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There's probably a real good story there but it was so rushed and compacted that it was hard to tell. It wouldn't have to be a five page dragged out affair but I think if you took your time it would have been better.

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