First of all, props to such an inventive Halloween story. Few would try it in a contest.
I liked the rhyming meter, sometimes going with couplets, sometimes four lines. It had everything from fun to horror. The elocution was good, with correct emphasis and release where needed.
I didn't think it was possible to be turned on and scared shitless at the same time.
Kingswoman has such a great voice and it pairs with your writing very well.
ill be quite honest & say i dont go for erotic poetry at all but that was great. Sometimes i felt the rhythm was off just in a few spots of character dialogue but otherwise 4 stars for some fantastic effort
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Great Halloween poem!
Very fun and creepy too. You managed to make the rhymes not sound forced and the story flow with the verse. Five stars.
A Fresh (nice?)
take on e.horror. Enjoyable, but the story has forever put me off of sleeping in a crypt.
Well elocuted
First of all, props to such an inventive Halloween story. Few would try it in a contest.
I liked the rhyming meter, sometimes going with couplets, sometimes four lines. It had everything from fun to horror. The elocution was good, with correct emphasis and release where needed.
I would hate to spoil anybody's crypt-sleeping fun! Just, you know, check up on your partner first and make sure she's not one of the ravening undead.
I didn't think it was possible to be turned on and scared shitless at the same time.
Kingswoman has such a great voice and it pairs with your writing very well.
wow
ill be quite honest & say i dont go for erotic poetry at all but that was great. Sometimes i felt the rhythm was off just in a few spots of character dialogue but otherwise 4 stars for some fantastic effort
oooh awesome
I really loved the gore :)
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