All Comments on 'Red Callum, Sweet Cate'

Very fun and creepy too. You managed to make the rhymes not sound forced and the story flow with the verse. Five stars.

take on e.horror. Enjoyable, but the story has forever put me off of sleeping in a crypt.

First of all, props to such an inventive Halloween story. Few would try it in a contest.

I liked the rhyming meter, sometimes going with couplets, sometimes four lines. It had everything from fun to horror. The elocution was good, with correct emphasis and release where needed.

I would hate to spoil anybody's crypt-sleeping fun! Just, you know, check up on your partner first and make sure she's not one of the ravening undead.

I didn't think it was possible to be turned on and scared shitless at the same time.

Kingswoman has such a great voice and it pairs with your writing very well.

ill be quite honest & say i dont go for erotic poetry at all but that was great. Sometimes i felt the rhythm was off just in a few spots of character dialogue but otherwise 4 stars for some fantastic effort

I really loved the gore :)

All I can is...wow.

Wow at your skills, the embedded story within the poem, the goriness, and KingsWoman's voice. It was brilliant, and I loved the visceral description, [but the eye winking from the nipple didn't scare me much ;) ] I'm a big fan of Horror stories, but this submission is something else entirely.

I don't know what else to say. I love poems that rhyme and tell a story at the same time. You just nailed the head with this one. Thanks for sharing. Too bad I don't read contest stories, else my 5 star would've been worth it.

Regards,

Bard.

I LOVED the story and the poetic form of it - very well done! (And I am not a horror fan at all - but it intrigued me and sucked me in, so to speak.)

In some places I thought the reading was a tad rushed - not enough pausing between the end of one phrase and the start of the next. But having read some poetry myself, I appreciate how hard it is to get it perfect, and how many takes this must have represented.

5*, hands down, hats off!

This is great! Hilarious and gruesome and fun. The text alone is fantastic, and made me have to dig out head phones to listen to the audio. I'm so glad I did. What a great reading!

Playfully grotesque. I loved it!

This was great! Loved it

Oh, this was a joy. What a gem - thank you!

Callum nor Cate,

Sadly, neither "the great"

A tale of woe, mayhaps spun from a foe,

Of LOVE, and instead, an agent of hate.

For history and victory, too true, are one,

But the truth, so rarely provided by those that "won",

Forsooth, indeed, 'tmight be,

The "pure of the marsh" is the most untrustworthy.

Uncomprehending and jealous, however poetic....

May still inevitably rhyme with the above.

Because rumors are tumors,

And light need not guide by force,

But likely, I take an unrelated course.

My thinking of what this poetry states,

Is so far from what Frosts Roads,

And the significance of the less traveled, of fates.

For within this travel, always, an abode,

Awaits.