The Two-Headed Monster

Great

Great story.

You've made for a Happy Hallowe'en!!

Great little tale....delightful progression and FAB climax and denouement!! Don't stop with the contest...keep on writing!!

Remarkable

Just a note to let you know how much I liked your story. So much character. So accurate to girls that age and so very sexy. Really good from start to finish and a wonderful pleasure to read. Thanks so much for sharing your work with us!

Francis_Toliver

Wicking good.

I am dieing to hear more about these two and good luck with the contest!

Great Story

I loved this story .It was a nice sweet story well worth the time it took to read it . Hope you do good in the contest .I am going to add this to my favorites list .Again Great Story ..

Phenominal work

Very rich characters. Highly relatable. This story had quite the trick and the perfect amount of treat. Great submission to the contest. A winner in my book. Like a previous comment, I truly look forward to hearing more from these 2 sometime in the near future. Congratulations and keep up the memorable work.

The BEST!

I thought that was an excellently written story. With the humor and that natural style to it. I have never commented on this sight. So, just wanted to wish you good luck in the context.

Funtastic!!!

Loved it. Very original and beautifully written. 5 stars all day long!

Very Hot

Reminds me of another two-in-a-costume story, a dragon, I think, but that was just a girlfriend. Sister makes it a lot hotter.

Greate Job

Loved the whole story

Brilliant

A very well written and loving story.

wonderful...

Very well done, laughed a lot...thanks

very nice

Very good story I laugh a lot and while written

Great story

This is the best story I have read in a long long time. It's funny with well defined characters. It's five stars from me.

Fantastic

Zane wasn't the only one unable to get rid of a hard on during that story.

See it all worked out in the end, though they did have their ups and downs

missed the horse costume

a very good story

Kinky and yet sweet and loving.
Well done.
I'd like to see them to become a couple and for her to come out of her shell to be her brother's lover.

Thanks for the read

Great Story

Fan-fucking-tastick! Loved the sister conchering a bad situation. Loved the covert situation. Loved Bro./Sis. sex connection
Just so very whitty and wonderfull outcome.
Just very, very good

great story

loved how Aria wasn't fazed by Zanes hard on! she must have wanted him for some time! since early adolescence I think! similar to a story called "costume sex" but better it might become a classic in time?

Hopefully there's more to come with this story. I can see where there could be a continuation of it. Thanks for a great beginning. Good luck in the contest.

Wonderful Characters

First, I do want to pretty much second everything [positive] commented on about the sex and the scenario. Really hot and really sexy.

But I also want to say I loved the characters - Zane's earnest ham handed-ness and Aria's wit, quick thinking, and ability throw down the curses and insults at the drop of a hat made them incredibly fun together and actually made the sex even better when it happened.

5 stars and a hopeful request for an eventual follow-up.

that was great!

Super story. Awesome job on building their relationship. One of the best stories on here. This story was a lot more than sex that's what made it so good. I hope this is the winner. Five stars for sure

Wow!

I got a great big hard cock from reading this gem! Erotic and sexy as hell! Please have Aria give his Big Jake a sensual handjob in part 2!

An awesome story!

This is one for recognition...very well done!

Fantastic.

This has got to be the winner.

*****

Great story! Enjoyed how the story and the characters evolved and flowed..... Dentally need to continue the story as well. Waiting chapter 2.

True winner

Personally I think the other contestants are going to be hard pressed to top this really great story. Both the plot and the character development were right on right down the way girls tend to insecure about their bodies.

nicely done

it was a tad confusing at first trying to figure out why she had become reclusive. and it was difficult for me to picture how they were harnessed together with her head off to one side, her head and body had to be diagonally in front of his, his head and body behind hers, yet still aligned at the critical points. but you slowly built up to a monster of a climax.

Loved this story!

One of the best I've ever read on Lit! I hope we'll hear more about Zane and Aria!

Fabulous submission

That was such a great story. Dialogues and characters were so perfectly constructed. I enjoy the slow pace and reluctance to give in, that only made it bettet when they abandon themselves to the pleasure. Good luck in the contest. Hope to hear about how they will struggle with the day after.

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In Part 2, Zane needs to fuck Aria's pungent, stinky asshole for a Thanksgiving treat!

Great--especially the dialogue

I loved hearing them bantering back & forth while I imagined them as 2 heads of the same beast. Very well done, and funny! Good story well told with creative sexual situations. Please win this contest and write more stories...

Brotherly Strength

Very well defined characters. Nice slow build up, sisters don't like their brothers very much, but Aria fell in love with her brother because of his strength of character. GOOD luck on the contest!

More about these two lovers please.

HC

GREAT STORY

The ending was very clever! I enjoyed this very much!!! PLEASE CONTINUE I WOULD ALSO LIKE TO KNOW WHAT IS IN STORE FOR ZANE AND ARIA!!

Holy shit!!!

That was awesome! It wasn't just a porno, it actually had well written charecters and dialogue, not to mention it was totally sexy! You should consider writing erotic books. :)

Excellent!

This is kind of different from the usual brother-sister incest scenario. Cleverly written. Aria sure had a dirty mouth for a 17-year old, it that trait added to her character. Add to their story of how they now have to sneak around to fuck.

5 *'s on the erection scale.

Would pay for a follow up

Please for the love of everything good, please continue this story. Even if you made it into a book, i would pay to read it in a heartbeat. Please announce it i am going to make an account just to follow you PLEASE!!! It's not even about the sex either, even though it's an erotic bonus, but the characters and how real it felt to read it, the way you wrote it, made me hooked from page 1, not skipping a single sentence. Only ONE other story has done that for me, and it broke my heart in pieces on the ending. The thing is, when you're good with writing, you gain trust from the reader, more than you can imagine, and the particular story that I read, the writer in my opinion misused his trust.

BRAVO!

This unique story could segue into a great multi chapter long term brother/sister relationship. So many of the incest stories begin with predictable scenarios that this one avoided. Great writing and plot, please consider continuing the story.

4/5. Decent, but not the best.

Character development is what authors seem to be forgetting. Zane's character was generic.

5stars!

LOL! Aria reminds me of my own girlfriend, she got a mouth that would put sailors to shame. Karin is 5'2" and feisty, I had to bail her ass off several times in middle and high schools! Guess thats why I married her and have 3kids. Nice story, very realistic, funny and a perfect halloween entry. Please do continue Aria and Zane's adventure, its very promising. Write more stories. -Keith

Wonderful!

I really liked this story. I'll be watching for more good tales from you.

Stunning!

I loved it, great work.

Thanks

Thanks to all the readers who took the time to vote and/or comment on this story. I'm glad that you enjoyed the tale of Zane and Aria and the two-headed monster that they became.

I don't have any plans at this time to write a second chapter (all of my short stories are designed to be standalone submissions) but who knows? Maybe Zane will need his sister's help at the nationals. I'm sure Aria will be happy to lend a hand or two.

~ Seanathon

Great...

Such a well written story, truly creative.

another story?

Great story! Are you planning on continuing this one? If not would you consider doing a similar story? Preferably another two person costume story. Thanks and keep up the good work.

Appreciation

Creative, smart, funny, sexy. Great work! 5+

Absolute best!

I loved it! Of the different costume stories Ive read, this is without a doubt the absolute best!! I was rock freaking hard and wanting more by the end of the story! :). I know this was a contest one-shot, but PLEASE do some follow-up chapters!! ;)

M@

Wow, considering you're working within pretty narrow confines...

that being having a pair of siblings within a single costume and engaging in sex, you've created a completely different story to the other story I've read in those confines.

Interesting feeling of innocence while at the same time clearly neither being a virgin...
I would definitely like to read more from this pair...

Well Written!

Great example of show don't tell. I had to stop and laugh several times.
Well done!