The Two-Headed Monster

Loved it

I thought your character development was superb. And the timing that you used to release various information about your characters was also very good. As somebody who has considered writing for Literotica, I found this to be a great subject for learning the art of characterization.

4 Stars!

I enjoyed the whole story development and characters! I would love it if you were to write a second part. There was no mention of birth control. On the pill or possible pregnancy? I love the creampie. More, more, more, more, more soon!!!!!!

There must be more.

Seriously, there has to be more to this. Hell, I'd write it if you want me to. I just want a continuation.

Excellent characters

I loved the story. The characters seemed alive. Aria was absolutely hilarious what a legend.

Great story, if a bit short.

I like the premise of the story, and how well it was written. I'd love to see it extended and find more details about the characters and what happens next. Please write a second chapter!

All Time Fave

This is likely my all time favorite story on this site, if a bit short. At the end, there really wasn't a conclusion and I'm REALLY hoping you'll continue the adventures of Aria and Zane! Thanks

Kudos!

Personally, I didn't find it too short at all and there was a nice little arch with Aria's character. The taboo aspect is hot, but the sex on stage, in public, with no one knowing really pushed my buttons. I've been away from Literotica for a while, but if this is any indication, the writing has definitely gotten better! I'll be checking out more of your stuff.

How many times have I bumped across this delicious story, only to feel the burning need to reread it? Tiny sister, BiG brother,perfect timing! Soo good!

I need more!

This Story it's amazing, but I really would like to know what happend after that night! please write a continuation!

SO CREATIVE!!!

the idea of being Bound to A large man in a bulky costume was an amazing idea! It allowed so many options on what could happen. Please please PLEASE make a sequel to this or another story with a situation like this one. Amazing story from an amazing author.

I just want to say great story, I especially enjoyed the part where they were at the dance. Sorry but the started to picture them in that costume and what they were doing I start to laugh and but the time they got on stage my sides were hurting and tears rolling down my cheeks. But I did love the story

Very well writen!

I really enjoyed this story. It was super sexy and most of all I enjoyed the character development. At first I was a bit lost as to what was wrong with the sister, but I had a feeling you would get around to explaining it. I have no complaints about this story and am going to now have to check out anything else you have written. If they are done like this one I am sure I will enjoy them just as much.

amazing

You are a great writer, and this was a very very well done work.

treat

I quite enjoyed the story. One of the things I actually liked was that they didn't bitch and moan about it being "wrong" or anything like that, so it came across as sweet and hot.

Fantastic

Very original. Thanks much.

the best

a really great story LOL.

The only problem I have is that a non-gymnast would not understand the harness.

Great one! Hot!

very likable fun characters, including mom!
5 stars,+ fave
going to have to check out all your other stories

hot costume

I really enjoyed the characters. The story was entertaining. I truly enjoyed it. I'll be sure to check out your other stories.

This was a great read and so was part 2 that seems to have vanished sadly

Great story

I was wondering though, why part two was pulled? It was very good as well.

Awesome Story

Great read. Keep it up. And you should really put part 2 back up!!

chapter two?

I liked chapter one better, but what was wrong with chapter two? There wasn't any underage stuff in it or anything... Did literotica just decide to yank it for some reason?

This story was excellent. I read Part 2 and like everyone else I am wondering where it went. I hope Aria and Zane's story continues.

Gah!

Where is part 2!?

More Please

This needs to continue. That wasn't an ending in any sense of the word !

Love the story

Don't understand why part 2 was taken down but I hope you continue this series... please respond

please put the second part of the story up again!

Please bring back pt2

please!

PART 2!!!

Dude, please put part 2 back up. It completed the story so well. We miss it!!

Overall a great story

I really enjoyed this story. I found it humorous and hot and I liked the characterisation of the siblings, it was pretty believable. At times I struggled with visualisation of the harness and the position of their bodies but your descriptions largely helped me overcome this.

I have to say that you lost me ever so slightly when they return from outside and continue with their liaison. I guess I felt that you'd done a great a job in leading us into the moment outside and it was clear that their desire was leading them both on. But the break in tension coming as it did...I don't know how realistic it was to have them resume their activities - nothing in their characterisation really suggested that would be the case. However, notwithstanding that, I feel like you did a good job in rebuilding the heat and the fucking on stage was a great twist, I really enjoyed that.

I've seen people referencing a 2nd part to the story? I'd love to read that. I do feel some investment in the characters and I'd like to see how their relationship continues. Does the sexual relationship continue? Does mom become aware?

All in all, great job. Thank you.

Uh part2? Missisng?

Hello I remember there was a part 2 of this story? Why was it removed? Are you continuing the storyline or will you let some else take the reigns? I know I for wouldn't mind seeing more of what you've got for Aria, but if you're not UP to the task you should allow someone else continue this story. It really is a great piece of writing.

part II

Only just found this story really liked the setup and Aria character, I see from other comments there was a part II or follow on, would really like the chance to see where you take this how there relationship develops. any chance you could re-post or let us know where to find it?

Well done!

Great story. Reminds me of another shared costume story, Tricked Then Treated by Jackking