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Editor needed
It was hard reading but understandable with the broken English being used. Thanks for sharing the story and in time your grammar will improve. 3 of 5 stars for exotic content :-)
Thanks for your comment
I would like to know my my mistakes about grammar. If it is ok, can you tell me what they are.
not a small cock
14cms is in the average range for erect penis size, so while he may have been smaller than Kadirs cock, he didn't have a small cock. Kadir had a big cock.
The problem with your grammar is that English is not your primary language and you write it as you speak it no doubt. Not very fluently.
Thank you.
Thank you very much about your recommendation. I will be more careful as possible.
good work
Good effort for a new writer. I too, give it three of five stars for content. I would see if you could get an editor to proof read. Good Luck!
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