and well written, too. this has the potential for a good series.
Excellent start. Looking forward to see how things develop.
Nicely done Kyla_girl, an interesting beginning. I prefer the word teaching vice training, but that is just me. Your score is pretty good for your first story, just a hint though, the better scoring stories are are usually a couple of pages long at least. I gave you a 5.
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nice start..
and well written, too. this has the potential for a good series.
Excellent start. Looking forward to see how things develop.
Interesting
Nicely done Kyla_girl, an interesting beginning. I prefer the word teaching vice training, but that is just me.
Your score is pretty good for your first story, just a hint though, the better scoring stories are are usually a couple of pages long at least.
I gave you a 5.
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