a good start. It better lead somewhere though. I did go to see what else you'd written and was disappointed that there wasn't anything. Therefore I hope you'll hurry and write more.
Anonymous 1: I agree, I need an editor. If you're interested in making some more editorial comments I've posted this story for critiques at http://forum.literotica.com/showthread.php?t=11008 15 .
The error you pointed out should read "...as...", not "...than...", has been changed, and will be submitted in a few days along with other necessary edits/revisions pointed out through the link above.
Thanks to all of your for reading. Chapter 2 is about half written and I hope to submit it next week.
We all have to start somewhere, and this it my start here on literotica.com, so sorry there's nothing more. But I'll try to keep you folks satisfied with a good story.
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Anonymous12/02/14
very interested
Your story is captivating. You're describing one of my most erotic fantasies. Please don't keep me waiting, even though I know how it ends; at least if it's anything like I dream about. I want to read your entire story. Please!
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Liked it
a good start. It better lead somewhere though. I did go to see what else you'd written and was disappointed that there wasn't anything. Therefore I hope you'll hurry and write more.
More Please
Can you please continue this as its just getting interesting
liked it
hope you write more......just hope she is a top....and he doesn't get too sissified n cross dressed
What on earth...
...does this mean?
" She held out her right hand and not so much grinned than laughed with her face. "
You need an editor.
Thank you
Anonymous 1: I agree, I need an editor. If you're interested in making some more editorial comments I've posted this story for critiques at http://forum.literotica.com/showthread.php?t=11008 15 .
The error you pointed out should read "...as...", not "...than...", has been changed, and will be submitted in a few days along with other necessary edits/revisions pointed out through the link above.
Thanks to all of your for reading. Chapter 2 is about half written and I hope to submit it next week.
We all have to start somewhere, and this it my start here on literotica.com, so sorry there's nothing more. But I'll try to keep you folks satisfied with a good story.
very interested
Your story is captivating. You're describing one of my most erotic fantasies. Please don't keep me waiting, even though I know how it ends; at least if it's anything like I dream about. I want to read your entire story. Please!
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