But not yet a story than can stand on its own. Please finish it, having started so well. Thank you, four stars.
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Anonymous01/18/15
An intimate view...
Yes it was concise, but one shouldn't judge a story on the number of words. I had the sense it was a very personal and real glimpse of your "secretdesire"... I would love to hear more. How dark are your passions?
English
So exciting!
Suggestion.. she could make him a cup of tea
So - an opening parargraph
Where's the story?
A nice scene.
But not yet a story than can stand on its own. Please finish it, having started so well. Thank you, four stars.
An intimate view...
Yes it was concise, but one shouldn't judge a story on the number of words. I had the sense it was a very personal and real glimpse of your "secretdesire"... I would love to hear more. How dark are your passions?
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