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by Anonymous10/26/14

So exciting!

Suggestion.. she could make him a cup of tea

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by Anonymous10/26/14

So - an opening parargraph

Where's the story?

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by Anonymous10/26/14

A nice scene.

But not yet a story than can stand on its own. Please finish it, having started so well. Thank you, four stars.

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by Anonymous01/19/15

An intimate view...

Yes it was concise, but one shouldn't judge a story on the number of words. I had the sense it was a very personal and real glimpse of your "secretdesire"... I would love to hear more. How dark are your passions?

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