Dream Club

Great story idea, but 3rd person never works for me

try 1st person next time. Ken

That is in the first person, Ken.

I think you'd prefer it to be from her viewpoint, though, right?
By the way, I liked the story!

2nd Person Porn Bad

It's difficult to write a porn story in 2nd person POV, and I don't think you pulled it off. 1st person from her POV would have been better, and probably would have been pretty hot.

Otherwise, an OK story.

My wife was covered in cum from about 15 or so anonymous guys, something I had organized as a surprise for her by taking her to an adult mens club. I told her it would be all right as the men eyed her, I lay her in the middle of a big bed in one of the rooms, no touching guys, that's the deal, she wants to be covered in cum. Touch yourself and she did and the guys stroked and came, she was covered. We got up, headed to the showers but she had other ideas, into a room, she lay down, legs wide open, oh god fuck me,and as I climbed on,pushed my cock into her so wet pussy, sliding all over her cum covered body, I drilled her wet pussy, pulled out and added to the slippery mess that was already covering her.