Those DDD and E size boobs are spoiling entire story. Normal boobs are enough for normal reader. This is valid also to all over 7 inch penises. Over that are shown in horse show.
Good basics with the characters but needs refined to get the reader involved .Some lead in rather than just jumping into an orgy. Some conversation and story plot then more detail of the sex scenes, not just bam here we are now we are done.
I also agree the unrealistic breast sizes makes it more of a comedy than a story that really gets the reader involved.
I love F/F & F/F/F & F/F/F/F stories but this one sucked, jumped right into the sex with no story plus the Huge tits, instead of 1/4 pounders we have 450 pounders and most of that tits and ass.
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Anonymous10/31/14
Pathetic
poorly written by someone who has never experienced lesbian love. This was a waste of time.
English
Those DDD and E size boobs are spoiling entire story. Normal boobs are enough for normal reader. This is valid also to all over 7 inch penises. Over that are shown in horse show.
I too
am tired of all the stories having women with oversized boobs. Can't you authors get realistic.
I bet SAnta was smiling
GOD story although you did lose direction a couple of times Keep on plugging her the only thing is next time can I watch Tenbears43
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Gigantic tits again? Really? Get more realistic!
the basics are there.
Good basics with the characters but needs refined to get the reader involved .Some lead in rather than just jumping into an orgy. Some conversation and story plot then more detail of the sex scenes, not just bam here we are now we are done.
I also agree the unrealistic breast sizes makes it more of a comedy than a story that really gets the reader involved.
Sucked
I love F/F & F/F/F & F/F/F/F stories but this one sucked, jumped right into the sex with no story plus the Huge tits, instead of 1/4 pounders we have 450 pounders and most of that tits and ass.
Pathetic
poorly written by someone who has never experienced lesbian love. This was a waste of time.
as erotic
as reading a class essay on "what I did while home on Christmas break".
OMG
Mucho Crappo, find another hobby, your writing sucks ass
PLEASE...
...can someone find a way to delete this crap?
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