I love the way this chapter turned out. Would have never been able to make it come together like this. For the next chapter, PLEASE let Becca and live in man get married BEFORE the holidays with all the noise makers coming home. HA, joke for a laugh. Excited for the next chapter to come.
Keep it up, loving the series so far. i hope you keep it going.
by
Anonymous10/30/14
Why?
That's a terrible twist, there wasn't even any foreshadowing. You had made a really good story and you ruined it.
by
Anonymous10/30/14
you jumped the shark
not only did you box yourself into a corner, if you do find a way, assuming you continue the saga, out, why would you expect anyone to follow the story now. the 1st 5 chapters were wonderful. This was not.
Now i just have to decide where the story ends so i can enjoy it.
by
Anonymous10/30/14
WOW!
Nice twist and continue with at least another chapter!
BRAVO!!
It would seem that there are several readers that didn't get the point. His mind went into overdrive at the prospect of a lifetime with this woman, and he fantasized, which is EXACTLY what erotica is. Thank you for those who had positive things to say, and for those who at least had the courage to take credit for their comments. Perhaps the others could pick up a pen and write one themselves.
by
Anonymous11/12/14
i liked it
i liked the story and i liked the ending it was a crazy twist i wasn't expecting and honestly i would like to see another written along the same lines of him knowing what was going to happen and maybe make different choices
by
Anonymous11/17/14
blissssss
Reading was sometimes a little strange (or farfetched for me) but always enticing and hot. Couldn't wait to finish the stories and boy what a finish it was. Unlike the open ends in other similar stories this one brought it all together.
I loved it...and so did my ...
Keep it up ;-)
As I read I thought maybe it could be a dream. It was a great story, thank you.
by
Anonymous12/19/14
Very good
A very unexpected ending and I loved it. During the story I kept thinking "no way" could one man keep up with so many highly sexed women and you completely surprised me. Good job.
Have just found your writings from the 'similar stories' box on the side and i'm slowly making my way through your stories, really loved the surprise twist at the end of this one, made me think of a novel called Replay I read a long time ago, will read more of your stories with anticipation.
im a bit biased because i love redheads with big tits...lol
loved every chapter,and i dont think the ending took anything away from the previous chapters. if anything, it made them better !!!!!!!!!!!
you are a genious...GREAT JOB!!!!!!!!!
btw. thank you for keeping anal to a minimum.
by
Anonymous01/09/15
Fantastic Story
This was a great story and thank you for sharing it with all of us
by
Anonymous01/11/15
oh wow
i really love your stories. you bring out the love in your stories that few,very,very few writers ever do. thank you for your stories and please keep writing more of them. thank you again. bob
by
Anonymous01/22/15
Great job!
The story was just too much fun! Great writing, great sex and an hilarious ending. Loved it!
by
Anonymous01/24/15
I onlly wish the stars went to ten... or eleven.
This has to be one of my favorite stories on Lit. You handled each scene as if it were the only one, and built well to a satisfying, if very surprising, ending.
An epilog where evveryone is happy at the wedding might be okay, but I would be fine with leavig it alone.
I have read several of your stories, and you have a way with words,a s well as creativity in choice of situations.
Please keep writing!
by
Anonymous02/08/15
you had me pissed at just about every character...and boom! you made me laugh
in surprise instead, then continue cackling as I realized just what a self-centered asshole the main character has to be to have a dream like that. Freud would have a field day. Nicely handled. Instead of feeling bad for clay, I feel bemusement at...main character's?...sociopathic id. Lol.
The dream-twist was such a relief! Ever since part 1, I had been sorry he hadn't married Becca; it was the one regret I had about the story - and you put it right for me. Neat, very neat indeed!
English
Best Chapter Yet
I love the way this chapter turned out. Would have never been able to make it come together like this. For the next chapter, PLEASE let Becca and live in man get married BEFORE the holidays with all the noise makers coming home. HA, joke for a laugh. Excited for the next chapter to come.
hot hot hot another chapter i give it 20 stars
Keep it up, loving the series so far. i hope you keep it going.
Why?
That's a terrible twist, there wasn't even any foreshadowing. You had made a really good story and you ruined it.
you jumped the shark
not only did you box yourself into a corner, if you do find a way, assuming you continue the saga, out, why would you expect anyone to follow the story now. the 1st 5 chapters were wonderful. This was not.
Now i just have to decide where the story ends so i can enjoy it.
WOW!
Nice twist and continue with at least another chapter!
BRAVO!!
My apologies
It would seem that there are several readers that didn't get the point. His mind went into overdrive at the prospect of a lifetime with this woman, and he fantasized, which is EXACTLY what erotica is. Thank you for those who had positive things to say, and for those who at least had the courage to take credit for their comments. Perhaps the others could pick up a pen and write one themselves.
i liked it
i liked the story and i liked the ending it was a crazy twist i wasn't expecting and honestly i would like to see another written along the same lines of him knowing what was going to happen and maybe make different choices
blissssss
Reading was sometimes a little strange (or farfetched for me) but always enticing and hot. Couldn't wait to finish the stories and boy what a finish it was. Unlike the open ends in other similar stories this one brought it all together.
I loved it...and so did my ...
Keep it up ;-)
A very heart warming story
As I read I thought maybe it could be a dream. It was a great story, thank you.
Very good
A very unexpected ending and I loved it. During the story I kept thinking "no way" could one man keep up with so many highly sexed women and you completely surprised me. Good job.
Great read!
Have just found your writings from the 'similar stories' box on the side and i'm slowly making my way through your stories, really loved the surprise twist at the end of this one, made me think of a novel called Replay I read a long time ago, will read more of your stories with anticipation.
Thank you !
i loved it!!!
im a bit biased because i love redheads with big tits...lol
loved every chapter,and i dont think the ending took anything away from the previous chapters. if anything, it made them better !!!!!!!!!!!
you are a genious...GREAT JOB!!!!!!!!!
btw. thank you for keeping anal to a minimum.
Fantastic Story
This was a great story and thank you for sharing it with all of us
oh wow
i really love your stories. you bring out the love in your stories that few,very,very few writers ever do. thank you for your stories and please keep writing more of them. thank you again. bob
Great job!
The story was just too much fun! Great writing, great sex and an hilarious ending. Loved it!
I onlly wish the stars went to ten... or eleven.
This has to be one of my favorite stories on Lit. You handled each scene as if it were the only one, and built well to a satisfying, if very surprising, ending.
An epilog where evveryone is happy at the wedding might be okay, but I would be fine with leavig it alone.
I have read several of your stories, and you have a way with words,a s well as creativity in choice of situations.
Please keep writing!
you had me pissed at just about every character...and boom! you made me laugh
in surprise instead, then continue cackling as I realized just what a self-centered asshole the main character has to be to have a dream like that. Freud would have a field day. Nicely handled. Instead of feeling bad for clay, I feel bemusement at...main character's?...sociopathic id. Lol.
That twist!!!
you made my day!!!!
Awesome!
I absolutely love the dream twist!
Wow, phew!
The dream-twist was such a relief! Ever since part 1, I had been sorry he hadn't married Becca; it was the one regret I had about the story - and you put it right for me. Neat, very neat indeed!
20 year dream!
AWSOME Twist that just made it perfectly Funny and Happy that he will be with the Right Family Member legally!
-Revol
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