This is so deliciously seductive and intriguing a tale I congratulate you. I thought it was going to be just another Cinderella story but you have designed such marvelous characters with characteristics of such villainy that I cannot help feeling jealous at your skill. Selfishness can make us an enemy to ourselves and those we would desire to please see us for who we are to our chagrin. I counsel you not to forget your protagonist... the complexities of his tormentors threaten to overshadow him.We have seen his perfections. What are his flaws? Beauty is truth- and truth is not always kind. Will he be flesh and blood? Or merely another puppet with no skill to cut the strings? I long to see your plans for him.
I agree it is intriguing. I feel badly for Cory though, being used as a pawn to hurt Lucas for not loving Xavier back. i have a feeling it is going to cause alot of problems for Cory who will pay for lucas' interest.
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fuck...
fuck the rules of the rich
What he said.
This is so deliciously seductive and intriguing a tale I congratulate you. I thought it was going to be just another Cinderella story but you have designed such marvelous characters with characteristics of such villainy that I cannot help feeling jealous at your skill. Selfishness can make us an enemy to ourselves and those we would desire to please see us for who we are to our chagrin. I counsel you not to forget your protagonist... the complexities of his tormentors threaten to overshadow him.We have seen his perfections. What are his flaws? Beauty is truth- and truth is not always kind. Will he be flesh and blood? Or merely another puppet with no skill to cut the strings? I long to see your plans for him.
I agree it is intriguing. I feel badly for Cory though, being used as a pawn to hurt Lucas for not loving Xavier back. i have a feeling it is going to cause alot of problems for Cory who will pay for lucas' interest.
love it!
I don't always read a lot , but your story had me fixated and read it all..now I am anxiously waiting for chapter 4 ..Keep it 'coming' ;)
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