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One of the Best
This is one of the best erotic stories I have ever read. It's lyrical, yet erotic. Something about it really got to me.
Egypt
Thanks to the author for writing on Egypt
Please, please write more on Egypt. I am facinated by anything Egyptian paticularly the 18th dynasty. It was amazing and wonderful to read an erotic fantasy with an Egyptian setting....Tell us more about Vanessa and her lover and also, give us other stories with an Egyptian theme. The Aten lives!!!
This is a rare gem.
Erudite and evocative, this is incredibly well-written!
It takes us across a bridge to the enigmatic, magnificent past and then brings us back with the powerful and beautiful gift of understanding.
Another excellent story
Another very well written, highly erotic story. Thank you for writing it.
Perfect
Thank you for writing such a lyrical story.
BRILLIANT! MIND-BLOWING!
The story was Brilliant, packed Great Intense Mental Imagery.
Now for the mistakes that I caught...
The details are wonderful. One error the spacing between seventh and eight paragraph. You forgot a period in this sentence…“She loved Egypt, and Egypt haunted her.” It should be Dr. Robbins. Again, another missing period in this sentence. “His dark beard and curly hair shot with gray made him instantly recognizable.” A third missing period in this sentence. “..a minor bother or nuisance, something to be avoided.” Perhaps another mistake in spacing after that paragraph also? I like the reference to Budge it was very entertaining and factual. I Loved the mental imagery of God ejaculating into the Nile. “She was drawn into his kiss, he felt himself rise to meet her.” “Where the rite would take place.”
So well written.
Really, really great. Crazy and cool.
Wow
I've been interested in Egyptology for some time now and your story was very very well written. Erotic, yes, but something deeper to the story as well. Please do write more..
Incredible stuff
Powerful, evocative stuff. There is room for myth and history in erotica, and you bring it all together effortlessly.
beautifully written
I was hooked from the start. Great job.
You leave me wanting more...
There is always a bit of disappointment when I come to the end of your stories, because I want more, more, more. Vanessa, Dr. Robbins...I want to see where they go from here. I want to know more about this god, about Egypt. I just want....more....
Into the Duat
excellent journey thro` the nether regions of ancient Egypt, sensuous & flowing.
This story was wonderful. I am at a loss for words to be honest.
You write so beautifully.
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