And something did happen. He had it all recorded on his I-phone. Stupid story. Poorly thought out with cardboard characters spouting absolute drivel.
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Anonymous11/04/14
Great reading??? No, just trash reading.
Sorry I wasted time reading this garbage. Clearly a "1 minus."
by
Anonymous11/04/14
quit
Quit quit quit.
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Anonymous11/04/14
Wow you guys are harsh!
This chapter wasn't so bad. It probably would have been better if she combined this to the end of chapter 1. I think our chief complaint is just not much sex in chapter 2.
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Anonymous11/04/14
Construcive
Trying to be constructive here. You definitely have the kernel of a great story. But as some of the previous critics have said, there's a bit too much extreme and unbelieveable 'action' and not enough story.
I love the petite, conservative Asian lady with a hidden ache theme. Just plan out a story line with a bit more care.
Good luck.
perhaps a anklet for her next as a reminder. a sign that she's fair game and she should submit to having cum in her shoes or giving footjobs in public whenever/wherever someone notices it.
English
Finally Part 2!!!
I've been waiting for the second part for so long! Great read thank you!
Must Read Ch 1 to appreciate this!
I enjoy the character development of Elizabeth so far. A very tittilating story and looking forward to chapter 3.
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Just terrible
And something did happen. He had it all recorded on his I-phone. Stupid story. Poorly thought out with cardboard characters spouting absolute drivel.
Great reading??? No, just trash reading.
Sorry I wasted time reading this garbage. Clearly a "1 minus."
quit
Quit quit quit.
Wow you guys are harsh!
This chapter wasn't so bad. It probably would have been better if she combined this to the end of chapter 1. I think our chief complaint is just not much sex in chapter 2.
Construcive
Trying to be constructive here. You definitely have the kernel of a great story. But as some of the previous critics have said, there's a bit too much extreme and unbelieveable 'action' and not enough story.
I love the petite, conservative Asian lady with a hidden ache theme. Just plan out a story line with a bit more care.
Good luck.
perhaps a anklet for her next as a reminder. a sign that she's fair game and she should submit to having cum in her shoes or giving footjobs in public whenever/wherever someone notices it.
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