You really need some help editing and proof reading this. I strongly suspect that English is not your first language, so it is very brave of you to attempt to write erotic fiction in English (and you have done a lot better job than I could have in any other language) but it does need some polishing.
I am particularly intrigued by the "sensible" teasing of your nipples - and while I suspect you meant "sensual", it does conjour up some interesting ideas!
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Anonymous11/05/14
From the old one, English as a foreign language?
An Indian writer who has no feel for English (quite a lot do have such a feel) has no business inflicting a poor story replete with illiteracies on literotica readers, Get a tough edoitor but better still refrain from writing,
This writer is not an original English-speaker, and has no pretty skills in linguistics. Right? Does that mean that s/he must not write a story? You guys need to understand that Literotica is not for original English-speakers only. And, how long have you guys been reading stories here? I suspect or mere weeks. Otherwise, you would have encountered hundreds of poorly written stories from authors whose names are clearly English/American and the plots are in UK or the US. Have you guys expressed your displeasure against them, ever? Stop being stinkers of a racist. Shed this stinking mental sickness, and encourage this writer if you can. If you cannot encourage and cannot be constructive in your suggestions, then just shot up.
English
nice ideas, but...
You really need some help editing and proof reading this. I strongly suspect that English is not your first language, so it is very brave of you to attempt to write erotic fiction in English (and you have done a lot better job than I could have in any other language) but it does need some polishing.
I am particularly intrigued by the "sensible" teasing of your nipples - and while I suspect you meant "sensual", it does conjour up some interesting ideas!
From the old one, English as a foreign language?
An Indian writer who has no feel for English (quite a lot do have such a feel) has no business inflicting a poor story replete with illiteracies on literotica readers, Get a tough edoitor but better still refrain from writing,
your story
Ruchibshi, you go girl!
When will sanity prevail?
This writer is not an original English-speaker, and has no pretty skills in linguistics. Right? Does that mean that s/he must not write a story? You guys need to understand that Literotica is not for original English-speakers only. And, how long have you guys been reading stories here? I suspect or mere weeks. Otherwise, you would have encountered hundreds of poorly written stories from authors whose names are clearly English/American and the plots are in UK or the US. Have you guys expressed your displeasure against them, ever? Stop being stinkers of a racist. Shed this stinking mental sickness, and encourage this writer if you can. If you cannot encourage and cannot be constructive in your suggestions, then just shot up.
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