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coach needed to be older
30 something.. gave a 4
leaves you wantng more
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Scary the first time, isn't it?
It is a bit scary the first time you post a story. It makes you feel very vulnerable because people can rate and say whatever they want and you are the brunt. Being anxious about stuff is a good thing.
I liked your first story. I think I would have toned down the peeing thing because it takes a degree of credibility off, ( I have never peed my pants because I would not excuse myself!). Advice, you have a good plot. Don't rush to fill it in one page. It takes just about seven thousand words to make it two pages and that is what I would shoot for. I gave you four for the story and an additional one for courage! Like I said, the first story is very scary! Isn't it? Good luck, Carole!
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