Yeah. I want to get turned out like that.
Very well written and hot. Good pacing to the action and plot. Now that you've given us a good teaser, the readers will definitely be wanting more. KEEP WRITING - you're good!
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Yeah. I want to get turned out like that.
A GOOD INTRO
Very well written and hot.
Good pacing to the action and plot.
Now that you've given us a good teaser, the readers will definitely be wanting more.
KEEP WRITING - you're good!
Click here to leave your own comment on this submission! or
Back to Forbidden or
More submissions by MarquisSlade.