All Comments on 'A Matter of Timing'

I like the twist. However, this should probably be in a different category... possibly Sci-fi.

I would have liked it to be longer, also.

I didn't see that one coming!

Silly but still a good read. Thanks for the read.

Left me with a big grin.

The funniest thing I have read in at least a week.

Never mind the arguments about category, it fits better than several others from the last month alone.

Funniest story I've read in quite awhile. See what you mean by this could be in sci-fi. The possibilities are endless.

with time travel and space warps...it may have already been done TK U MLJ LV NV

It could have gone in humor, but giving that category alone would have deflected from the drama and easily predicted the punch line. Also, I felt the story was far too silly for SciFi, those serious geeks (and I'm one of them) would've guessed the ending in the first line and come up with so many plot holes in my thesis in these Comments longer than my original flash fiction. It was just a silly story that amused me, folks, the categories available just didn't appeal, and the Loving Wife ended up without a penny.

Funny story, but wrong category...Sci/fic is the right one...

Had a great chuckle over this one. Nice diversion. At least in this category you will have more readers. 5 stars and thanks for posting.

great story and funny keep writing stories like this 5 stars

But no. That was just silly. And probably in the wrong category. But who cares. The attempt at cleverness failed so the category doesn't matter. It just wasn't interesting or entertaining. Too implausible even for fiction.

This is a lot of fun. Always a sucker for time travel stories:)

I got a big chuckle and an out loud laugh at the ending. Thanks for the happiness that popped out. 5*

And now he owes a shit pile of child support. Good riddance to bad rubbish.

Short and funny. Comedy is hard, so congrats.

I enjoyed the story. WTF about those who argue category. Who Cares.

None of my stories posted are loving wives but I post here for two reasons, no cheating wives category AND more importantly the people I want reading my stories read "loving wives" stories.

End of story.

Thanks

CB

And fitting for loving wives,since Sci first was not the primary reason for the story.I liked the twist at the end,when he figured out how to beat the bitch at her own game....of course there is a paradox here,but so what?

HAHA ,ha or as they now write laugh out loud !

That's a good one!

AMerryMan

Since I had a good chuckle from one of these.

5* just for the laugh.

Well done.

very good.

and if I hadn't lost my log in details, I'd favourite it, too!

been a while since i had a laugh from an LW story :)

A lovely story as far as it goes but it is unfinished. There is no resolution to the divorce hearing which is what the story is really about. The techno-magic is fun and interesting and there is a lot of scope for the judge's reaction to it. Does the austere, serious minded judge accept the evidence at face value or does she dismiss it?

What is the outcome of the hearing?

Come on, Spencerfiction. Please finish the story.

Great little tale. Tells just enough to make this a great read.

Five Stars

Wackdoodle, he did not know he married his granddaughter because "in his timeline" he hadn't fucked her grandmother yet. Think about it. He did not travel to her grandmother's time until driven there by the court case. Time travel fiction is so appealing because paradox is implausible but appears logically possible. It's like an optical illusion of stairs going both ways, it works from each perspective but is a trick of the way our brain interprets what it sees.

The court case comes to an end because the original marriage MUST be annulled because of the illegal kinship of the two parties. Therefore no marriage, ergo no divorce, even better, no pre-nup!

Of course he is liable for the upbringing of HIS child, his ex-wife's unnamed parent, if still alive, possibly cost him maybe up to a million. But he's worth zillions and he doesn't have to give one single penny to his ex as grandparents are not liable for some else's kid.

Now come on folks, we're writers, slavin' away doin' our stuff, the least you could do is read it properly! :p

Did not like the story too much, but it was something to think about.

It was silly, but it sure was fun. Don't worry about the category; it fits where you want it to fit.

I read three of your things lately; you're getting better each time. But hey; what do I know?

This was too short to be worth a real five, but I fived it anyway.

Oh Man, what a trip! That was some groovy acid you dropped on us. Psychedelic mushrooms in my head, man.

neither cuck nor BTB

REFRESHING

And delightfully silly

What goes around, comes around.

I am sur prised at its low rating. I bet that is Sci-Fi it would have a 4.8!

Of course the old question is always there. Why would she get pregnant knowing that her infidelity would be detectable. Excellent Work.

Regardless of the date on the calendar when she had sex, SHE was married to her husband, so she was having sex out of wedlock.

LOVED the ending!

and it is rankling that I can't figure it out:

"His brief, noticing Alex was wearing cotton trousers and sandals, couldn't help gasping, "So, it's true!"

Not a local of the UK, I suppose I can be forgiven... but author, or perhaps some other wise person, there is clearly a joke here, the set up is unmistakable... fill me in on the cultural reference?

Thanks,

Green-something

Green117, there is no hidden joke here, the expression of disbelief by the rather immature (and therefore cheap) barrister representing the plaintiff was merely a device to show that he did not believe his client would win until he saw the evidence by his own eyes. It was merely an aside by me to reflect that the junior barrister had taken on the "silks" with little chance of winning the case (or getting paid his fee). I felt that including his "minnow beating the sharks" reaction fitted the scene.

So his ex wife's mother hated him but he had no idea why till he went back and banged her? That's a pretty good paradox! Love that our guy managed to save himself in the end!

Leonji

Like a Beatles song written in a drug induced haze.

Well, if nothing more ,it seems, adultery is to stay, for a long haul. Atleast, that's one sad reality this story confirms.

Obviously that's simply the hard core L.w. reader in me talking. Searching for a gloomy scenario in this, otherwise, lighthearted flash. :-)

Anyway, it was a nice humorous take on the parody called "the modern marriage".

A 5, for sure.

Thanks for sharing.

This sounds like a bad sci-fi movie heh.

please don't tell me that this is the best you've got!!!

1* as a place-marker and not worthy of comment.

has the freedom to write anything he wants; I found it quite amusing; good one this.

This gets a big 5 stars if for no other reason than originality!

funnnnnnnnnnnyyyyyyyyyyy !!!!!!!!!!!

Original for sure, have to give credit for that.

Decent story

Nuff said

This could be a great story if it had more substance to it.

I enjoyed that. Different LW story with a lot of humor.

High humor but sketchily written and unsatisfying.

Ray Stevens did it better........”I’m my own grandpa “

STOO-PID!

So much more you could have done with this story. It’s almost criminal (no pun intended).

I enjoyed the whole story.

This one took a few readings to completely understand, but I enjoyed it again.

Now that's a flash story. Does pose the obvious chicken and egg situation, though.

How dumb can it get???

LMAO. Crazy, but fun story. Gotta give it five just for originality.

This could have been a lot longer. But it doesn't need to be. Everything we need is right here.

Five stars for putting time travel into a LW story! I don't think that's the way time travel typically works, but it's in a courtroom! And with a very cute wrinkle at the end! If you have a time machine, and access to everyone else's past... then you are unbeatable, unless the author writing your story has you messing up everything you try!

Great funny story. Very original

AAAA++++

I’m lost.

What? No Delorian? Good story, could however used a little more explaining.

Unfortunately the best thing I can say is that it made me smile

Short, sharp (very) and amusing.

Thank you

What is happening ??? Twilight zone for sure

Cute, funny and stupid but I still liked it. Short was the most redeemable value.