The Nightie Before Christmas

There were a couple of times I lost the rhythm of the original poem, but other than that, you did a good and fun job keeping the original's timing and structure while, obviously, making it Perv-y.

different but sweet

I'll never look at the night before Christmas in the same, way again well done tenbears43

Fun, if not exactly original

And, like the other commentator, I found the scansion and rhythm a little jerky and off-putting, but still done well.

Edit Please

I basically agree with the other commenters, but I liked the idea, and found it entertaining. It does need editing.

Cute!

The rhythm was downright horrible, mostly, but the rhymes weren't bad and you got the point of the poem across. And, by the bye, his name is Santa Claus without the "e" unless you're reviving the Walt Disney Tim Allen movies (but what is one letter among friends, right?).

Roger.

an amusing job

And I like the title too. It's great to picture a mother in a nightgown, or skirt or dress, with nothing on underneath of course. That's so her boy can just stick his hand up inside, male children being the mischievous imps that they are. The boy finds something warm and wet and furry, and breaks out in a big grin. Boys are naturally inquisitive as well, so the lad probes around with his nimble fingers, sliding one or two inside, as his mother smiles at him. Real soon he's sliding something else up inside, and humping away like crazy with all the power of his hips and young ass. Her son gives his mother her Christmas present, not exactly made in Santa's workshop--a great convulsive cum. And the boy has himself a merry little Christmas as he blows his young balls and splatters his semen all over his own mother's cunt-walls. Verily, tis indeed the season to be jolly, and every day should be Christmas Day for sons and their moms. A boy's penis and his mother's vagina--made for each other.

after about the 2nd or 3rd

error in rhyming and meter
I became frustrated.

it wasn't even a good knock off.

and what did the title have to do with the poem/story?

I will admit I played fast and loose meter and rhythm at times, but I think calling it "horrible" is an exaggeration. The vast majority of the poem follows the original closely, it took some doing. As to the name...It's a pun. That's all. I know it doesn't have much to do with the story, but it's short, pithy and it gets the point

Someone needs to learn the difference between 'Parody' and' Knock-Off'.

Parody is a legitimate literary form and is a (usually) affectionate reworking of an authored work for comic effect; 'Knock-Off' implies criminal intent to fool the public into accepting something counterfeit is genuine; this author has turned out a humorous and competent PARODY of the Clement Clarke Moor classic poem, at no point has he tried to counterfeit the original or incorporate it into his own work and pass it off as original, so sit down, shut up, and only open your mouth when you have something worthwhile to say. I wrote this for you, Rightbank, and I'm typing slowly because I know you can't read very fast.

loved it

Besides a few spelling flaws it was great
Do you have any tips for an aspiring writer?

Rightbank

At least you're not Anonymous. But this isn't Milton, forgodsake. Don't use a flamethrower on a novice.

I liked it

Clever and fun. I think it was great.