"Taking" My Sister's Virginity

SO Hot

This had my cock hard right from the start

how lucky can one boy get?

The hero of this excellent story has unlimited access to his baby sister's sweet little slit. And he takes takes full advantage, by pummeling it with his big hard cock and blowing his brotherly balls right up inside her cute little coochie. As if that weren't enough, it turns out that his mother's got a yen for what her boy's got jumping around in his pants. She spreads her thighs and her son has the greatest experience life can offer. He shoves his cock up the same cunt he came out of, fucks his mommy real good, and unloads his young balls up where he was once a baby. Lucky motherfucker.

Very Hot as always

Loved it, especially how his sister already knew and was so willing when it came to the date night.

Great Story, however...

I feel the inclusion of the mother was tacked on at the end. I would rather have a separate chapter dedicated to the seduction of the mother. Just my humble opinion.

Part 2 with Aunt Bev

There has to be a part 2 with the aunt........
5 *'s

After a delicious build up, a bit of a let down

My cock was dripping with anticipation as I eagerly awaited the deflowering of Lisa. I felt as though you took your time getting to the main event but it was disappointing how little detail the actually fucking and subsequent threesomes had.

good story but

The story was on a fundamenatl level fine. But and its a big but the confusing cuased by use of the wrong term and the editors failure to catch and correct compunded the mistake. What mistake is the use of "come/comming" when refering to things sexual, where the common accepted version for orgasm/semen/etc. is "cum/cumming" that this for future reference.

Why do people

Complain about word choices, spelling or all the other stuff on a fuck story. This was a great one and who gives a crap if the unpaid volunteer editor had sometime wrong or missed something.?

Nice story

For Andrea. You have her wearing a sundress. Then he is taking off her jeans?? Not sure how the clothe change happened.

Mediocre stroke

Succeeds at appealing to the target audience, i.e., the under 25s with no experience of reading/understanding/enjoying anything more difficult. There is some of that on this list; this sure wasn't in the competition.

great stuff but

when the story shifted to the sister knowing about the plan,thought the story went downhill and to rushed getting mom involved,it might have been better to do a chapter 2 for that

Enjoyed reading

Enjoyed reading it, almost didn't read it all because of the chat talk, but glad I did.

Another great story

Right up to your standard. I love your writing and always has me wishing it was me getting a thick cock in my cunt. More stories like this please. Especially the Illustrated ones with plenty of nude photos in them. Thanks,
Marie

Badly done

Very badly written, paced. The central carchter was far to egotistical. It was clearly not aimed a mature audience

Good, but

It was a good story, but it had its problems.

The guy was pretty full of himself.

The friend being used like that was a turnoff for me.

The sister knowing and being a total slut the whole evening just didn't seem to work in the plot.

...and finally getting the rushed ending to get the mom involved just killed it for me. It wasn't needed at all. What could have been a nice ending just died and went into the plotline of some college guy's jacking fantasy.

great story

love love loved it
predictable? a couple plot twists, a sexy sister and a guy who gets more and more likable as the story goes on.

i actually thought it ended up being rather romantic.

again great story and one of the best I've read in a while

comments comments comments

This is a really hot storey. Any guy who has a hot nerdy sis and hot mom would love to have this wet dream cum true.
just my un-perverted comment.

great story for me and 5 stars for silkstockingslover's Christmas story
wilbur

Made it to page 3...

I just had enough of this guys mjssgenistic attitude. I need to like the main character just a little bit to enjoy a story. This story is seriously demeaning to women. Just too crude for my sensibilities.

Author's Note

First: Thanks to all who read, voted and commented.

Second: The legendary cum vs come. Grammatically correct is come for the act and cum for the seed.(I'm about to come. vs I shot my cum...all editors I have talked to for years agree that is right).

As for adding the twist ending with mom...I agree it was a last minute addition and maybe I should've kept it out but it just seemed like a fun end twist.

On the other hand, Ive written a lot of stories and some do indeed seem rather predictable (but I sure didn't feel that was this story, actually I thought this was quite different than my usual)! But each to their own.

Lastly, the brother was supposed to start of arrogant and then as he falls for his sister that night there was suppose to be a change in him.

Again though, each read the story as the read it.

Thanks again whether you loved it, liked it, tolerated it or hated it.

Jasmine Nov 2014

Again !

again an amazing story from you, just keep writing please :) .

Puzzling

Yes, I picked up on the brother's character development: he was a jerk, then a jerk-off, then a fucker (can't say lover). He had the character and fidelity of a dog in rut.

But the Mom figure not only entered the story too late, she lacked motivation---why did she suddenly want to lay her son? Or what did Lisa do to set it up?

I was also puzzled about what happened to Lisa's hymen? If she was still a virgin, why didn't Eddie break it? No pain, no blood, no nuthin'.

As for Mom, it's OK for her to burst into the room and catch her kids fucking, and to be OK with it (maybe the parents were siblings or cousins themselves), but to have her join in ruined the story psychologically as well as structurally.

The hell with the nay sayers!

Great story - 5 stars! This is a free site - unpaid writers - unpaid editors. My sister writes for a living and even her paid editors miss a few things at times. From my perspective, this was an excellent story written for the Holiday Contest - it had everything - the holiday theme, character development, a side plot of the conspiracy (and side sex with Andrea), build up to some hot sex with sis, follow up sex and a twist ending with Mom becoming a slut as well. Keep up the great work!!!!

Nice, thanks!

Very nice story, thanks for sharing. I like how you structured the story almost like a heist, added some nice drama to the lead up.

Only thing I would suggest is that throwing in the Mom in the last page is probably unnecessary and a bit of a distraction. Even the title is about getting to the sister, would have saved any approach on the mother for a second story if there was a story you wanted to tell there. Just kind of a 'know when it's over' thing.

Otherwise liked it very much!

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ho Ho ho tenbears43

Eh

I enjoyed the first part, the whole " mommy-slut" is old and tired, like her. Try and think of something original instead of your uninspiring thoughts.

Fanfuckingtastic!

You are one of my favorite authors. Reading it brought me back to my senior prom of over 30 years ago. I still wish I had taken my stepsister to the prom and fucked her brains out in the limo and at our beach house all night long.

Reminded me of a Babysitters Club Book With Smut In It

I couldn't get all the way through it. It read like something that was written for children... which made it even weirder. The dialogue of your characters was just way too seventh grade. It just struck me as juvenile, and I couldn't enjoy it as an adult. Your style itself isn't that bad. If you write something else that's actually geared towards grown ups I might give it another go.

What is wrong with the writers on this site? Dialog is not meant to tell a story. I guess it's how the wannabes write though because it's too hard for amateurs to tell a story when all they can imagine is a conversation.

AWESOME!!

Very nice, i was hoping that he would get his mom during the holidays. It seems his sister beat him to it though. Can't hardly wait to hear about the three of them taking Aunt Beverly all at once.

Maybe Lisa and he can double date with oloder couple as well!

Wish I could give this story a ten

Please do not pay attention to the negative comments. I thought it was the best story written so far. I loved it and kept me hard the whole time. Please keep writing and I liked the mother inclusion.

All I can say is: CHAPTER TWO?

This was good, a few mistakes, but HOT good. Let's see if you can continue with Chapter Two. Need the background on Lisa and their mom (name?) -- preferably with mom in the room, and helping tell the story. Save Aunt Beverley, and New Year, for Chapter Three. Oh, do not forget Lisa's friend -- do not leave her "out in the cold."

What is up with the anonymous jabs

For those who think they are great critics and writers, why post anonymously? Do you have any stories posted so we can see how it is supposed to be done? Yes this is posted anonymously because I am not a member. I do think this was a decent story and would just like to remind you all that no one forced you to read anything on this site.

Amazing

Need more, amazing story, awesomely written, an had me wanting more all the way through. R12345

God damn

Another amazing story Jasmine. This was amazing. I can't wait for chapter 2 which hopefully will have Lisa seducing the mom and bringing in the aunt for new years. :) Looking forward to it.

changing clothes in the car

when he picked her up at the 7-11 she was wearing a sun dress. by the time he was stripping her, she was wearing jeans

simply lust filled wonder!!!!! i cant wait for part 2!

My cock was hard as hell thruout and i cudnt stop from coming three times thru-out this wet-dream/fantasy story

Great build up

Kept me reading the whole way through. Some more development of the relationship between brother, sister and mother in chapter 2 would be great

hot

pity daddy didn't join in too

loved it

started slow but did get to nylons and skirts. Liked to have more leg / nylon tease. Loved the submissiveness. Part two with more mother and sister tease. Let them get bent over furniture. Nylon slips would be a different tease from mom around the house.

Very well written!

I was really impressed with the story! The plot went along deliciously and I really enjoyed the twiSt ;). Usually its a turnoff to me when the story is about the brother and sister and the author drags the parents in, but it was tastefully done with a modest amount of possible expectation! Unlike another commenter, I don't think the story would have improved with the dad in it.

Thanks for the great writing and Ill look forward to reading your other works!
M@

Great read

Great Story but needs to be continued. Tells us about taking the Aunt, plus need to take all three of their asses, and some with Andrea sharing in the fun. Maybe the dad taking the daughter and then all three or four or 5 of them together.

Rocking

Thanks jas for one more hot story.definetly one of your best,keep up the good work as we are always up n on the edge as well.

As always a great story

A great story. love how you pull all the things together. Please Keep the story going, and tell how Lisa seduse mom you said you would tell it later. But as the norm dad gets left out. If you add him into the group then they would not go around trying hide it from him. Mom sis, Andrea and the Aunt could sleep in who ever bed they wanted for the whole night.

you did pretty good

I gave you a five again you do good work I'm not into nylons and seven inches is kind of stubby.Other wise good I am a little less than 5'9" packing way more than that. Big just doesn't seem to be the right word more like average seems to me.At least the girls aren't Big chested cows.

aver all, pretty good

I'm not super into stockings, or submission, but I liked the story anyway.
Very few errors. Big points for that! Nothing ruins the flow of a story for me more than seeing "and" instead of "an" or similar things.
Really liked the build up, and then the part about who knew what was great!
Some of the inner thoughts and character motivations really rang true.
For me, the mom joining in was not believable. Also the crazy amount of times he cums and how quickly he is hard again during that scene kind of broke my suspension of disbelief.
Side note for another commentor: according to several studies average penis length is right around 5.5 inches. If you think 7 is not big, then you are exceptionally huge. You should probably look into a porn career.

Just great!

silkstockingslover, this was truly a great story! It wasn't the erotic parts that were good, but the overall story and the buildup of the events (especially the bro and sis part) were really good. You cannot stop writing!

I've never really been able to read a lot, then I started reading Erotica... and by far I LOVE how you tell stories, especially incest ones.

Very jealous

If only I could meet a guy like Eddie! Fantastic writing and impressive vocabulary.

besides for the overuse of the c-word, which is like nails on a chalk board to me, it was a great read. 8/10 would read again

Fantastic story

Great story. Can not wait for another chapter on how Lisa seduced mom, and If they get the Aunt. They need to bring dad in so they do not have to sneak around behind dads back. If they bring dad in they can all fuke while they are setting around watching tv.
Who has his child first sis, Amanda, mom or Aunt.