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Curious :)

This has potential. :) I'm curious to see where you take it. :)

I agree

An interesting start to a well written story.

Agreed, an excellent start. It's refreshing to read something by someone who seems to know and understand the English language; too many don't seem to have a clue. Will be looking forward to where you take this.

Definitely curious

I'll be on the lookout for updates, this could continue on to a really great story :) There were a couple editing flaws but other than that I am anxiously waiting for the next installment! Don't be fearful of your writing ability, you are marvelous.

Looking forward for the next update, sounds interesting! Good work so far!

Good detail, you've begun to paint an interesting picture.i will look forward to seeing where this goes.

Good Start

I really like the story so far wish there was more of it though...now ill be waiting for next installment

keep it up

Doing good so far a good plot being developed keep it up.