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What a Load of Crap
Turnabout Marriage - What Marriage your story was puerile and good for nothing but to shit on
I didn't liked the end of the story!!!
I didn't liked the end of the story!!! Why? because in all this time they didn't found a man that would put them in an hospital bed for a long time...If that happened their life would become normal again...
Give it up SreveWallace..
And crawl back into your hole.
turn round loser
fairie
1 star
if this story was on paper
I would use it to wipe my ass, that was it's only use,
I like the premise of the story, but...
The whole thing reads more like a synopsis or an outline. There's no passion, no angst. IRL, no matter how open minded, Dave would have a big problem, especially seeing his wife admit those feelings to Doug. Also, knowing the fragility of men's egos, to praise Doug to the heavens in front of her husband like that, so soon in their transformation seemed kind of heartless. I could see the process as more drawn out, taking weeks to reach fruition, with many conversations between Laura and Dave, Dave and Doug, and all four of them.
Hope your reading fans have better sense . . .
Then to think any of this polyamory lifestyle is healthy. Read some statistics on STD rates and get a clue what the whole point of fidelity is within a stable culture. You're not a bad writer, but you have depicted a lifestyle fantasy that is wrong to glamorize. Might as well introduce drugs into the excitement. Why not? Oh, that's right, drug use will eventually kill you. So will promiscuity.
Nice wholesome story
Another great winner from this gifted author. Sex is so natural and flowing. Well done and more ....
Yeah, right........
we can totally believe this "account" as utterly factual and realistic.....like we can believe that the moon is made of cheese.
I hope you got something out of spinning this yarn. I'm tired and swallowing a significant amount of disgust.
I stayed with you from the initial episodes hoping it would go somewhere interesting. Frankly, it has simply gone off the axles and is mired in an apologetic mess.
You won't convince anyone else to adopt the lifestyle you propose with this storyline. Your declarations are weak and do not ring of passionate commitment, but rather come off almost reeking of pleading self-justification.
Too bad, your a good writer (except for the rather lengthy and very boring narratives), you just espouse ideas that won't hold water, let alone anyone's attention.
It's a good thing
I didn't bother reading ep. 3-6. 7 reads just the same as 1 & 2. Sluts justifying their lifestyle without worry about jealousy, STDs!!, or other consequences. Hubby must shut up and fuck or go home. Lives totally devoid of meaning. Not really even good fantasy, since there is nothing to overcome.
Good story
I don't understand the negative comments - it's a story and some practical issues get glossed over. In nearly every story I have read the women are always ready for continuous sex all through the month. We all know that is not likely the case but there is no need to spell it out in a story. The same is true of STD's and pregnancy. In a story, all women are on birth control and all participants are clean. In real life you may have to be a little circumspect but there is no need to spell that out in a story. Some of the events are a little more realistic than others but, overall, it was a good fantasy. Despite a few high sounding speeches, it was well written and the basic philosophy of conquering jealousy and spreading love around sound positive to me.
Another of those pathetic drivels fourth rate stroke story written by a degenerate for degenerates !
Just garbage about rock fucks brick ! "1*" !!
Update
I would like to hear more about their exploits.
Hot, hot, hot
Wow, what a sexy, hot and somewhat thought provoking set of stories. Those negative comments are not taking the story for what it is, fantasy. You should just read it and enjoy it. If you don't enjoy it, just don't read it.
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