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Part II?
You can't leave us all hanging there like that !
Part II
Please tell me there's more. Maggie is so hott.
Want more!
Ugh! So fucking hot! I want to read more about you and Maggie. My cock is so hard right now!
My my Maggie
Maggie you can fuck my ass any time you want.
Saving the best part for the next chapter?
I'd love to read about Maggie fulfilling her promise the next night. Then, maybe they can go to her place for the "bath and beyond" parts. ;-)
Two minor quibbles:
1) You chose to use a real store, Bed Bath & Beyond (which should have been capitalized, with no comma between "Bed" and "Bath", and with an "&" instead of an "and"), but I don't believe that those stores would have an overnight shift starting at 2 a.m. A fictional location would have suited the story better.
2) You said, "Upon arrival, she rested on the bed, and spread her legs," and he strips down and then you followed it with "I then climbed on top of her and was under the covers." Why was he "under the covers"? She's on top of the bed and never got under them herself, and it's not like they were getting in a bed in one of their homes for the night, either, so why have him getting "under the covers"? It's a small thing, but it didn't make sense.
Other than that, it's a good beginning and I look forward to reading more about their sexual adventures together.
Part 2
Hurry up with part 2. I can't stand the wait!
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