The Mind is Flat

Suggestion

You should write a follow-up story on how Lauren gets revenge on the girls of the Sorority. Maybe by enlisting the Geek's help. she was stupid to be so trusting, but they deserver it for taking advantage of her.

i get the point you wanted to make about not following with the crowd, but it ended up a horribly anti-woman story. sex as a weapon, sex as punishment. in truth most situations of abuse are not so easy to opt-out, and this tale helps victim blaming more than it fixes the structures of oppresion.

pledging?

The girl in your story is rushing three sororities, hoping to get a bid from her first choice, and would have pledged her first choice had she received the bid she hoped for.