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by Averygoodlay11/25/14

Not bad

Not bad, but the spelling mistakes ruined it, I don't often say anything about spelling as I suck at it, you need to read your own story before you post it.

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by Kufan96911/25/14

Thanks!

Sorry for the spelling errors, I'm new so I'll try to make sure it won't happen again!

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by Anonymous11/26/14

Good flow, needs some serious editing.

This is a fun story -- but really, did you have ANYbody edit this? This is like a rough draft of a story. Lots of words wrong or missing. Punctuation errors, misspellings. Get somebody else to read it and mark it up and hand it back to you. Print it out and read it yourself using a ruler under the lines to limit the words you see as you go down the page. Find the places you left out words or used the wrong words. Read it WORD FOR WORD out loud and make sure it makes sense.

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