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What on earth?
Where did this idea come from??? Very cool premise, never seen anything like it at all. Well done.
Interesting
wow. That was dark. Very creative. Well Done.
Really nice work, please write more.
Hi, just read you story, I enjoyed it alot. I like the way you describe how she feels in each part of the process and that most of it was pleasurable.
Most of all I liked that there were no teeth involved as that really makes it not fun for the victim. I wasn't sure if you have ever heard of Deviantart, it houses some very fine writers of this genre (vore) where you might find some stories that you enjoy as they cater to this type of writing.
I want to make just a little bit of constructive criticism if I may, its in no way meant to be negative, its just so if you do some more vore it might appeal more to people that like it.
Your overall story was wonderful, it depicts a person that enjoys touch and that she enjoys this creature alot but it would be nice if she went a bit further in her exploration, you mention that the creature has a tongue, and when she went in knees first on her second entry into the creature i feel the creature might have explored her body with it and increased her pleasure. Im sure if the creature eats vines it probable had a prehensile tongue and could roam all over (and perhaps inside) her body increasing her pleasure to a new level. Keep up the excellent work, hope to read more from you.
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