Wild Oats - The Cruise

This piece had a ton of potential, but none of it survived. To me it read very trite and juvenile.

Sweet

I enjoyed this story. Sweetly Erotic. I didn't lost my virginity this way, but I shared several women with my dad like this story.

Juvenile and silly

There is no way an 18-year-old wouldn't know what a vagina is and that a cock comes when stroked.

The dialogue was childlike. The story read like it was being written by a 14-year-old guessing what sex might be like.

Not much here to turn on anyone.

Contrived and hard to believe

The story started out hard and fast (pardon the pun), but quickly became silly and unarousing. There's absolutely no way an 18-year-old dude wouldn't know female parts, and the dialog with the cougar teaching him sounded like the bird and the bees talk. Boo, hiss!