I was really enjoying your story but was a little disappointed that the end just sort of fizzled out. He basically just turned out to be a doormat and he deserves whatever he gets.
Pretty much a let down. All that work, planning, explaining and chapters and he ended up a dumb-ass cuck anyway. Why?
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Anonymous11/28/14
brits crap
wimp story 1*
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Anonymous11/28/14
Seemed promising, then this chapter...
This chapter wasn't worth reading.
Shouldn't have wasted time even writing it.
It would've been better to just leave it unfinished.
And, seriously; by calculations they are what late 40s - 50s? With them having been married for 20+ years, after college...
And, she being obese; liable to have a heart attack or stroke during birth. Not to mention all the other complications with pregnancy that late in life.
Seems like this chapter was just cr*pped out to tie up loose ends; there are just way too many holes in it to even make sense; let alone come to this conclusion...
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Anonymous11/28/14
Lets not fret
This writer throughout LW had never made the Man to man up he prefers cuckold and wimps,FTDS could come up with something.
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Anonymous11/28/14
Terrible
Pretty much a let down. All that work, planning, explaining and chapters and he ended up a dumb-ass cuck anyway. Why? ( could not of said it better Lookingforit ) ...MER..
Okay, the baby's born, DNA proves he's the Father. She rules the roost because she now possesses all the money. She did her homework. Either, she takes charge and never cheats again or she finds another local lover while he stays home and watches the kid. Maybe, because she's at that age. She goes through menopause, loses interest in all sex.... now, he's in a sexless marriage. so many ways this could actually end.
This guy had a marriage for 20 years. The marriage did not produce any children. His wife was a slut. He got rid of her. She forces her way back into his life on the pretense that she is pregnant with his child. He knows it can't be his. He allows her to stay so he can fuck her and record the porn. This guy has done next to nothing with his life.
...I understand he drove home, leaving her clueless, burnt everything, even sold the house within a week and you never once describe her reaction?!? Chapter 6 start somewhat in the future...that jump does not come well. I find it irritating.
Sorry...I actually thought you could do a great deal better..
Then you might think about giving up writing, right? Planing thoroughly, total destruction of everything at home acting as if he were an arcangel and then you describe a total wimp without power, strength or self-esteem? No way your readers are going to take that without comments.Seems to me you had a wonderful story there but you lack the abiloity to a proper finish. Sorry. Not even 1 star (usually 4)
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Anonymous11/28/14
What a TOTAL WASTE OF FUCKING TIME! I think this is the biggest pile of shit I have ever read on this site! It was promising at the start, what happened? Get tired of your own 'story'?
The biggest one is that they don't discuss her cheating and her future plans after the little bastard is born. That he allows her in the door strains credibility. That he speaks to her civilly is hard to believe. This woman did her best to ruin his life, yet he still lets her in the door?
This was supposed to be your ending? Why couldn't he have left her luggage at the bottom?
Why would be even stick around for a conversation? He has nothing of value there, why not simply leave? And if he's so sure he's not the father, then walk the fuck away!
He knows he's not the father. He has her where he can control the situation. He can finish the divorce, get her to the hospital, and he's free to chuckle again. Brilliant.
Shame on me for reading past the first installment. I guess others will like it and the writing is more than competent but there is not one sympathetic character, in fact all are loathsome. I suspect this was supposed to be funny. For me it fell flat on my face, they guy who invested this much time in a non-story.
You did warn us. I'll probably give the rest of your stuff a pass. You have other fans I'm sure.
dud anyone notice the aithor's location/ nationally.?
BRITISH... That says it all
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Anonymous11/28/14
Why???
This poor sap finally gets his life together and dumps bitch wife, go there some interesting events only to be back where he started with this bitch. Why???
The only reason that I can think of was that you were one of her Fuckers!!!.
From the reactions here this chapter should get the negative prize. But you know that the individual chapter was really very funny if you aren't invested in the back story! I really enjoyed as Humour and Satire!
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Anonymous11/28/14
You piece of shit
Can't believe I read this drivel for this ending. please kill yourself.
Hey you're free to be a cuck faggoty puss if you want, and to write stories to that affect. But that warning at the beginning was misleading. The way the previous chapters were written, that could have meant we were going to have a BTB, and all cuck losers would be disappointed. It's not so much that you're a pansy Brit cuck, as it is the fact that you misled us all. I'll recall your byline and not make that mistake again. I only wish Lit would offer a 0, (which only makes sense anyway; think about that Laurel), so you (and others), could get the loser 0 you deserve.
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Anonymous11/28/14
1 star
Wow had high hopes but the crashed and burned. This ending was just trash.
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Anonymous11/28/14
Fucking loonie toon!
This has to be the DUMBEST ENDING to a story I've ever read! Idiot authors!
Truly an ignominious ending and very unsatisfying. The protagonist, with his tongue in cheek self deprecating attitude, at first is found not to be self deprecating at all. He is not worthy of attention. He literally is a living example of insanity according to A Einstein. A one since that is the lowest rating possible. I feel like my mind rotted as I skimmed this part.
I forgot that you are the king or maybe queen of cuck. The story started out so good, you lured us in with the husband having a little back bone, and pride. Then you let him get revenge, move to France then Spain. Get a job, get a life and then as you were getting the final stroke from your Dom, you took it all away and said "fuck everyone that is reading on this sight, I'm going to be just like all of the other girls and take the male's nuts away and have the glorious female fuck him over forever".
Cunt. You should warn us ahead of time so we can just move on in our search for anything on this site to do with the wife fucking up and the husband winning. Futile I know, but at least we wouldn't waste time on this shit. And quit commenting as an anon saying you like the way these stories are led right to a wonderfully fulfilling end.
read most of the other comments. Not many liked it, some were down right rude. I don't want you to get a disease and die or die any other way. Your bull would miss you too much. But when HDK thinks your story is wimpy, you know that you took a cuck dump big time. He is one of the most hardcore RAAC writers here and he thought you messed it up.
Wow, again.
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Anonymous11/29/14
Waste of time
So you build up this story as a man finally doing something about the emotionally abusive whore he's married to, then you flat out end it with him remaining a wimp? Why do all the stuff from before? He might as well have stayed in the UK with her.
I'm just pissed I wasted time on this story to get the ending I did. Maybe FTDS will do something better than the drivel your ending turned out to be.
I absolutely chortled with delight at this final chapter
Brilliant!! You took a stock, standard BTB story (written however with great verve, pacing & enthralling twists which is why I kept reading - I don't mind well done such as by Stangstar or Jezzaz) & completely turned it on its head!!! Maisie wins. Our hero will be happy too no doubt when he finds out the little scrubber is in fact his. I detect also she has been chastened a bit & changed too. Wonderful. You know you had it dead right when the BTB crowd and anonyfucks have all dripped venom on you. 5* & favourited!! Ha! Ha! Ken
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Anonymous11/29/14
Opposite twist stories?? When?
Who will write such stories, where the husbands do reconciliation for example for the sake of the kids and the husbands divorce the wives after 5-10-15 years for a younger better women?????? I think the time is ripe for such stories!
Obviously you really do hate men!
I agree that you shouldn't add any more chapters to this onerous bile, as I'm sure that you would certainly make it worse.
In fact, I'm not only pleading with you not to finish this shit, but I'm pleading with you to just don't write anything anymore, at all, ever.
I understand that you are a product of the Brittish cuck culture, and if you feel compelled to continue, there must be some local non-men, cuck, male bashing, sites that would more than welcome your rather distasteful drivel.
But please spare us men (British, American, et al.) wasting our time wading through six chapters of offal without at least the courtesy of a wimp warning at the beginning, unless of course your intention was to be offencive, which is pretty typical of the male bashing bitch writer invective.
English
Disappointing End
I was really enjoying your story but was a little disappointed that the end just sort of fizzled out. He basically just turned out to be a doormat and he deserves whatever he gets.
Wtf ever
I have u 5 stars every chapter till this shit came out. Where's the half a star button
Regretting reading this crap
You said you wrote this story for yourself and posted it just for the heck of it, if that's true than you are one weird (wimp?closet cuckold?) dude
Pretty much a let down. All that work, planning, explaining and chapters and he ended up a dumb-ass cuck anyway. Why?
brits crap
wimp story 1*
Seemed promising, then this chapter...
This chapter wasn't worth reading.
Shouldn't have wasted time even writing it.
It would've been better to just leave it unfinished.
And, seriously; by calculations they are what late 40s - 50s? With them having been married for 20+ years, after college...
And, she being obese; liable to have a heart attack or stroke during birth. Not to mention all the other complications with pregnancy that late in life.
Seems like this chapter was just cr*pped out to tie up loose ends; there are just way too many holes in it to even make sense; let alone come to this conclusion...
Lets not fret
This writer throughout LW had never made the Man to man up he prefers cuckold and wimps,FTDS could come up with something.
Terrible
Pretty much a let down. All that work, planning, explaining and chapters and he ended up a dumb-ass cuck anyway. Why? ( could not of said it better Lookingforit ) ...MER..
Okay, the baby's born, DNA proves he's the Father. She rules the roost because she now possesses all the money. She did her homework. Either, she takes charge and never cheats again or she finds another local lover while he stays home and watches the kid. Maybe, because she's at that age. She goes through menopause, loses interest in all sex.... now, he's in a sexless marriage. so many ways this could actually end.
Depressing
This guy had a marriage for 20 years. The marriage did not produce any children. His wife was a slut. He got rid of her. She forces her way back into his life on the pretense that she is pregnant with his child. He knows it can't be his. He allows her to stay so he can fuck her and record the porn. This guy has done next to nothing with his life.
Jumped too far into the future...
...I understand he drove home, leaving her clueless, burnt everything, even sold the house within a week and you never once describe her reaction?!? Chapter 6 start somewhat in the future...that jump does not come well. I find it irritating.
Sorry...I actually thought you could do a great deal better..
Good story till the end
The story was good until the last chapter. Then he just capitulated and folded when the cunt said it might be his.
1 star.
Terrible ending...
So, ex-husband is a wimp and slut wife wins. What an exciting ending (not).
"I can only take so many negative vibes at once"
Then you might think about giving up writing, right? Planing thoroughly, total destruction of everything at home acting as if he were an arcangel and then you describe a total wimp without power, strength or self-esteem? No way your readers are going to take that without comments.Seems to me you had a wonderful story there but you lack the abiloity to a proper finish. Sorry. Not even 1 star (usually 4)
What a TOTAL WASTE OF FUCKING TIME! I think this is the biggest pile of shit I have ever read on this site! It was promising at the start, what happened? Get tired of your own 'story'?
Agree with @slaverowan...
This was a good story till the end, then it went down...Not enough down to ruin it, but the story deserved a better ending...
Several problems here.
The biggest one is that they don't discuss her cheating and her future plans after the little bastard is born. That he allows her in the door strains credibility. That he speaks to her civilly is hard to believe. This woman did her best to ruin his life, yet he still lets her in the door?
This was supposed to be your ending? Why couldn't he have left her luggage at the bottom?
Why would be even stick around for a conversation? He has nothing of value there, why not simply leave? And if he's so sure he's not the father, then walk the fuck away!
Dumb Ass
You were pretty clever for five chapters what happened ? dud of an endng we almost had a btb with a happy ending
Wow
You sure shit on the readers with this ending.
When future
possible readers see the chapter ratings, they will be forewarned about an unpopular ending. Many will not read the story - I know I wouldn't.
what's the issue?
He knows he's not the father. He has her where he can control the situation. He can finish the divorce, get her to the hospital, and he's free to chuckle again. Brilliant.
An ignominious ending...
... to a fairly boring story. When will you writers learn that most of these multiple part stories turn out to be just that, boring.
6 Parts for this?
Shame on me for reading past the first installment. I guess others will like it and the writing is more than competent but there is not one sympathetic character, in fact all are loathsome. I suspect this was supposed to be funny. For me it fell flat on my face, they guy who invested this much time in a non-story.
You did warn us. I'll probably give the rest of your stuff a pass. You have other fans I'm sure.
oh my god
I've wasted so much time for shit
NO MATTER HOW FAR YOU GO--UP---DOWN---AWAY
some thing just never change. TK U MLJ LV NV
Can we give -5 ratings for truly pathetic stories
Pile of shit
i'll just say this
the ending was even worse than the rest of the story. and the rest of the story was shitty.
Piss down your own throat, Spencerfiction
Vile, stupid and putrid, Go write poems to your faggot lovers, you turd munching fool.
How to kill a fair to poor story
This ending was the pits. One of the worst endings ever, but this writer really blew it. The end !
OUCH!!!!
My head hurts. What is happening here?
A Bizzarro world story, lol. Gave you 3*s. Because........ huh. I guess from habit.
AMerryMan
REVLOTING CRAP
to the author.... FUCK YOU TOO and i hope you get cancer and die
dud anyone notice the aithor's location/ nationally.?
BRITISH... That says it all
Why???
This poor sap finally gets his life together and dumps bitch wife, go there some interesting events only to be back where he started with this bitch. Why???
The only reason that I can think of was that you were one of her Fuckers!!!.
Wow!
From the reactions here this chapter should get the negative prize. But you know that the individual chapter was really very funny if you aren't invested in the back story! I really enjoyed as Humour and Satire!
You piece of shit
Can't believe I read this drivel for this ending. please kill yourself.
False advertising
Hey you're free to be a cuck faggoty puss if you want, and to write stories to that affect. But that warning at the beginning was misleading. The way the previous chapters were written, that could have meant we were going to have a BTB, and all cuck losers would be disappointed. It's not so much that you're a pansy Brit cuck, as it is the fact that you misled us all. I'll recall your byline and not make that mistake again. I only wish Lit would offer a 0, (which only makes sense anyway; think about that Laurel), so you (and others), could get the loser 0 you deserve.
1 star
Wow had high hopes but the crashed and burned. This ending was just trash.
Fucking loonie toon!
This has to be the DUMBEST ENDING to a story I've ever read! Idiot authors!
WTF
Truly an ignominious ending and very unsatisfying. The protagonist, with his tongue in cheek self deprecating attitude, at first is found not to be self deprecating at all. He is not worthy of attention. He literally is a living example of insanity according to A Einstein. A one since that is the lowest rating possible. I feel like my mind rotted as I skimmed this part.
Why Did You Give Up?
You write a story with intrigue and drama. Then you end it like a Britease wimp one off. Shit.
ridiculous
No backbone, stupid ending and the last chapter sucked.
I disagree.
I loved the ending. I only wish that we found out that his condoms were old and he actually was the father.
Oh shit is right.
I forgot that you are the king or maybe queen of cuck. The story started out so good, you lured us in with the husband having a little back bone, and pride. Then you let him get revenge, move to France then Spain. Get a job, get a life and then as you were getting the final stroke from your Dom, you took it all away and said "fuck everyone that is reading on this sight, I'm going to be just like all of the other girls and take the male's nuts away and have the glorious female fuck him over forever".
Cunt. You should warn us ahead of time so we can just move on in our search for anything on this site to do with the wife fucking up and the husband winning. Futile I know, but at least we wouldn't waste time on this shit. And quit commenting as an anon saying you like the way these stories are led right to a wonderfully fulfilling end.
Wow,
read most of the other comments. Not many liked it, some were down right rude. I don't want you to get a disease and die or die any other way. Your bull would miss you too much. But when HDK thinks your story is wimpy, you know that you took a cuck dump big time. He is one of the most hardcore RAAC writers here and he thought you messed it up.
Wow, again.
Waste of time
So you build up this story as a man finally doing something about the emotionally abusive whore he's married to, then you flat out end it with him remaining a wimp? Why do all the stuff from before? He might as well have stayed in the UK with her.
I'm just pissed I wasted time on this story to get the ending I did. Maybe FTDS will do something better than the drivel your ending turned out to be.
I am going to try to be positive for a whole week.
Your character was consistent. He was a wimp in the beginning, he was a wimp in the end.
The wife was consistent. She was a thoughtless whore in the beginning, she was a thoughtless whore in the end.
The started out fat, they must have ended up fat because he can't even climb a flight of stairs.
So this was a consistent story cut into similar sized chunks and had me mildly curious as to how things went.
I absolutely chortled with delight at this final chapter
Brilliant!! You took a stock, standard BTB story (written however with great verve, pacing & enthralling twists which is why I kept reading - I don't mind well done such as by Stangstar or Jezzaz) & completely turned it on its head!!! Maisie wins. Our hero will be happy too no doubt when he finds out the little scrubber is in fact his. I detect also she has been chastened a bit & changed too. Wonderful. You know you had it dead right when the BTB crowd and anonyfucks have all dripped venom on you. 5* & favourited!! Ha! Ha! Ken
Opposite twist stories?? When?
Who will write such stories, where the husbands do reconciliation for example for the sake of the kids and the husbands divorce the wives after 5-10-15 years for a younger better women?????? I think the time is ripe for such stories!
Duna
Damn Bitch!
Obviously you really do hate men!
I agree that you shouldn't add any more chapters to this onerous bile, as I'm sure that you would certainly make it worse.
In fact, I'm not only pleading with you not to finish this shit, but I'm pleading with you to just don't write anything anymore, at all, ever.
I understand that you are a product of the Brittish cuck culture, and if you feel compelled to continue, there must be some local non-men, cuck, male bashing, sites that would more than welcome your rather distasteful drivel.
But please spare us men (British, American, et al.) wasting our time wading through six chapters of offal without at least the courtesy of a wimp warning at the beginning, unless of course your intention was to be offencive, which is pretty typical of the male bashing bitch writer invective.
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