Full speed ahead! Good story, especially considering it's your first. More, please!
The idea of the story is great, but you need to make it grammatically correct in order to make it good. There is a real lack of punctuation, making it hard to identify when the characters are speaking.
More please.
YES YES YES !!
Hope to see more. Great writing!!
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D**n the nonnies!
Full speed ahead! Good story, especially considering it's your first. More, please!
Could be good but.....
The idea of the story is great, but you need to make it grammatically correct in order to make it good. There is a real lack of punctuation, making it hard to identify when the characters are speaking.
Nice to see the amazon sex position!
More please.
oh Hell yes!!! I am THERE ~
YES YES YES !!
Great start!
Hope to see more. Great writing!!
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