I enjoyed the story! The language sounded real to me. If I didn't know the slang, the inference was enough for me to figure it out. Stories start to read the same on this site, and I found this refreshing, I like the humor -- "I bent over to get a nothing that was on the floor" made me giggle -- and my only complaint is that it wasn't longer. Keep writing!
2 Stars at best, I think it could have been more if we could understand more of it.
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Anonymous11/30/14
Hmm
Lots of missspelling...and I don't mean "wit". Your use of slang...attempted use of slang, didn't make your story more authentic. It made you seem like a moron. I was more offended than aroused. Try again.
English
Well that was awful.
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WTF
Translation please.
Ebonics at it's best...
you're trying to hard to be ghetto...rewrite it in English please...
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I want to like this, but please translate it. I like the premise, but I want to like this more.
Thank you.
Didn't bother me.
I enjoyed the story! The language sounded real to me. If I didn't know the slang, the inference was enough for me to figure it out. Stories start to read the same on this site, and I found this refreshing, I like the humor -- "I bent over to get a nothing that was on the floor" made me giggle -- and my only complaint is that it wasn't longer. Keep writing!
NOT GOOD
2 Stars at best, I think it could have been more if we could understand more of it.
Hmm
Lots of missspelling...and I don't mean "wit". Your use of slang...attempted use of slang, didn't make your story more authentic. It made you seem like a moron. I was more offended than aroused. Try again.
good lovin
Its OK but could be better
I want MORE!
Keep writing and don't stop just got gold on your hands.
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