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a skank and an asshole
whats new
Nevermind the haters nice first story
Good job putting your story out there. I liked the connection between them and the nice guy getting a chance. I'm curious to see where it goes from here.
Really
This could have been a very nice story. In your next one, please give us some background on the characters so that we can like or dislike them, understand them, and feel what they are feeling. Here, we don't know why her hubby was "a dick"--an especially odd word choice given his tiny cock size. Also, be careful of that also, as are there really 4" ones out there? Here also, why mention that she has seen three cocks without following up on that? Also, is our hero in a relationship, if not, why not? Etc. I still rated it 4 as it is close to a good story.
Thanks for the constructive comments
Thank you all for taking time to comment on this and give some feedback. First of all it is my first submission and I did not expect it to be fully-fleshed out, but I will spend more time on that for future ones. There were no real villains or heroes, just people in a situation making what they can of it all.
It is written in 'UK-English', so "Dick" can mean several things. In this context it means 'a$$ hole'. - Hal
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