Kudos for writing a story that is interesting...I bet that Elizabeth and Dave were "making pictures" of their own.
How about a foursome for Part 2?
Thanks!
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Anonymous11/30/14
Ending
I enjoyed the build-up but, the description of the act was a little brief. I don't think you knew how you wanted to finish the story. The finish was way too short and cut things off.
Where's the incest? Is that in part 2?
Nice story, but needs some proofreading
Kudos for writing a story that is interesting...I bet that Elizabeth and Dave were "making pictures" of their own.
How about a foursome for Part 2?
Thanks!
Ending
I enjoyed the build-up but, the description of the act was a little brief. I don't think you knew how you wanted to finish the story. The finish was way too short and cut things off.
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