Liked the artwork,
Liked Ashesh"s comment!
Demure , sweet
Submissive bride !!! 5-ed
To cut off the picture just below the freckles. How did I know you have freckles? Love the eyes
I'm always the submissive. The only time I have the control is when I tease or get on my knees... Something about making a guy "weep" is highly arousing for me and even more so when he does something about it
Nice, I like it.
I love when my woman wants to make me weep!
Morrison, waiting for the sun. People would argue whether he was a poet or not, but many of his have touched me as yours has now. The photo is a perfect complement to the poem.
Beautiful, the painting too.
Needing release or at the point of no return?
You have swayed me to thinking the need for release.
Your poem very much reminds me of a dramatic monologue, wherein the narrator tells a story and reveals him or herself in the process. Your old man does that and for that reason I don't think you need the last four lines: his love is implied throughout the poem so why explain it at the end?
You have a great narrative flair and your poem is very engaging to me as a reader. Come check out the poetry feedback and discussion forum if you like to write poems and want to hang out with others who do. :-)
Just my opinion of course and thanks for a wonderful read!
I recommended in new poems, sorry for the delay
Pablo Picasso on the make
I shall file these words for future use
your poem - excellent, a bit too prosy
the art, interesting, I see the old man's face mirrored
This is excellent--concise, clever, and beautiful.
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