tagErotic Poetry"A Cock, It's Me" Revisited

"A Cock, It's Me" Revisited

bylorencino©

Though I have checked back often enough, nothing can shake my belief that, from a purely literary point of view, this is the finest poem I have ever written. (OK, hyperbole is a bad habit of mine, but it is a kind of naughty fun.) When I wrote and published it here last year I read it to my wife. She stopped me when I got the word "bitch" and said she really could not see anything beyond that word. It was anathema to her. I protested that the word was crucial to the whole sense of the poem and that it would become lame without it. She was not convinced in the slightest and remained adamant that the word had to go if she was to listen to the poem.

Then it struck me: There was indeed a more powerful though vastly more subtle word, a word that drew its power in part from the subtlety the word "bitch" does not enjoy. So I read the poem to her again with my new word and she admitted that it was rather good. Then, humbly gratified that my wife had approved, I went to delete the older version and substitute the new only to realize that I could not do that without also deleting the wonderful comments I had received.

The name also seems to have been something of a branding problem and hardly the stuff of literary excellence at first glance, but it is the only honest name I can come up with right now.

So I'm leaving the old to preserve the generous comments and adding this as the "official" version with the name somewhat intact.

[BTW Can you feel, if you mouth the words silently while reading, how sensuously the tongue and your pallet interact when forming the sound "cock." "Cork," which is close, simply fails to produce that same magic in the mouth.]

Then I made a few more tweaks and relized it never ends . . .


A Cock, it's Me 2

a cock
it's true, I am all cock at times
and you allow it
celebrate it
become the hand that caresses it
tenderly
lingeringly
the lips that embrace it warmly,
languidly
the swollen cunt that swallows it
whole,
wetly
the woman that rides it demandingly
sweatily
until it drags your pleasure explosively
to beyond oblivion
and I rest with you,
now infinitely more than cock

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