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Click herethe long narrow house is just that, long and narrow. The poem is devastatingly sad.
the visual form speaks to me of the howl rising and spreading up from the point of the woman and into the sky to the gods
having said that, i wonder if paring this back further might help ... do you think it would lose to much, v, if you removed
all forced blank
finally restrained by her cousins
and moved 'she falls to her knees' to precede 'above her daughter's coffin'?
I'm not sure it needs to be a 'concrete' poem the words are enough for my 5
and retain a meaning. The shape is like an ending, or the grave. I never thought of pointing a poem like so, like pointing to death, or whatever the mind makes of it.