- Non-Erotic Poetry
- Ah Seline, Seline
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(Thank you, Keats, you are always an inspiration.)
Right! Over my shoulder, a low cuprous tone
Of Sol's salient demise illuminates blue slide
Of clear unsheltered skies. The moon a scythe of bone.
A gaunt grey matador stands grand before the scorn
Of Venus venom formed, she so transmogrified,
Spawned of sulfurous tome. A wit with razor borne.
Bright star so odious, horns of slivered moon,
In the infirmament of a starless black ovule,
A lone picador goads with dance from Grand Guignol --
Hell on a celestial scale. Spheres play a discordant tune.
Ah Seline, Seline, oh, no Shepard boy, I? I'm
Sick of your red overture, your black sundering air,
Sick of your palaver placed treacherous in time;
O vision paradisaical turned downside. Why care?
Signed,
Your toreador,
Expect a flower in the morning
- COMMENTS
PoissonSurLaLuneabout 13 years ago'Cause you left a mean one on one of mine, but nope. It's a great poem, really nice formal approach, a lot of very striking imagery and wonderful command of rhythm. Seriously, read this one aloud. Feels perfect in the mouth.
SeattleRainabout 13 years agoYou take your craft seriously, twelve-o, and it shows. The moon visuals were brilliant, I never thought of the crescent moon in that ay before.
my little monsters are wanting breakfast. Thanks for sharing your poetry with us.
vrosej10about 13 years agoThis is not to my taste but it is well written and obviously appreciated by people who know more about classical poetry than me and I can recognise the good stuff when I see it, so five. One thing I with give it is an A for euphony and I agree with the person who said it should be an audio. I think it is a poem meant to be read out (as mine are carefully written to be).
Angelineover 13 years agoI'm not sure I like the letter ending because that "Why care?" seems like such a perfect place to stop. I also am not wild about the alliteration, think I'd like it less in my face but maybe I need to read it more. Otherwise it's brilliantly discordant and funny, classical and post-modern all stewed together. It's also a wonderful example of sound being more important than theme or even meaning: I don't need to understand this or get all the references because the words just sound so good in my mouth.
Liarover 13 years agoYou navigate the genre with ease, and pulls off just the right bombastic gloom.
"transmogrified" jumps out at me. Makes me think of Calvin and Hobbes. Maybe I'm just unfamiliar with the lingo.
Thumbs up.
GuiltyPleasureover 13 years agoMake this an audio please! The language is wonderful - Keates'd fall on his keister laughing......or he'd applaud.
Love ya - Tess
twelveooneover 13 years agoAuthorAh Seline, Seline, oh, no Shepard boy,I
Serious, bog, it really happened, nah, you know me well. Source was Keats's Endyminion, "O heaven ambrosial", nothing more. Thought of some moon tart, coming down and molesting some poor goat herder...
well, the Greeks where noted for that kind of crap, forcibles too...Western Civ at the git-go.
Problem I have with Keats, is he was born two hundred years too early. I like to think about what he would have rebelled against today.
PS. I'm always serious when I take a piss, ever since Elvis Costello's My aim is true.
