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Click hereI don't ask for much
but what I want is something money can't buy.
All I want is to wake up with you in my arms
to start a new day where the first thing I glance upon is you.
All I want is to gaze into your beautiful green eyes
to see your soul reach out to me in ways we've never experienced before.
All I want is to feel your lips upon mine
to feel your tongue glide against mine... fighting for domination I willingly give you.
All I want is to feel your heart against mine
to feel it beat out the same rythym as my own.
All I want is to prove how much I love you
to show you our love goes beyond all reason.
All I want is to hold your hand
to let you guide me by my own hand, as well.
All I want is to worship you day and night
to treat you like the queen you are.
All I want is to dream with you
to dream of a life without pain.
All I want is to see your smile
to see you joyful and happy.
All I want is to make a life with you
to make a life where anything is possible.
All I want is to love you forever
to make my fairy tale come true.
I don't ask for much
but what I want is something only you can give.
has one recall a broadway play and movie and wouldn't it be loverly. TK U MLJ LV NV
All I want ~ seems quite a lot. Reads like a list ~ but there is a heartfelt quality to this rendering.
Powerful feelings here, diluted by too much repetition;
Combine these 2-line pairs into about 4 strophes
And only once in each strophe let the words, "All I want is," appear. Just a couple small suggestions but should give your words much more kick.
This poem does not have many flowery words, however, I really like it for the simple and honest words that were present in every sentences. Wishes and dreams could only be fully understood when stripped of meaningless, flowery phrases that would divert the reader's attention. I would like to print this poem for myself if the author would not mind. Please say ok Stormy...Pretty please...
P.S. The only thing I would like to change is the "green" word. ^_^