Comet

byCeliaisAliena©

Nothing is unwritten. Every moment is carved
In cut stone. What stranger brushes the crowd
Unseen, unnamed, atomic--
Your future lover, nemesis, anonymous
Now but pulsing through space
On orbit to smack you some dark day,
Your delicious snowball of doom?

So go, solitary one, and spin
Through your space, lone and dim.
Untraced, I streak the stars
In inimitable ovals, glitter-sprung
Darkling frost. Seasons wing
Us on, and, sure-set,
The hour must come when we'll-- splat!

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by butters06/18/14

oh i really llike this

a delicious pulse of sibilance throughout, like the swish of nanoseconds being brushed aside till the inevitable impact

so much going on with the phrasing it was a delight for me to read. thankyou.

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by todski2806/18/14

interesting

I had to reference back to the title

delicious snowball of doom, definitely caught my attention,
didn't like the ending, but it does tie in with snowball, solid write,

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by twelveoone06/17/14

very well

well done
good phrasing, word choice
Unseen, unnamed, atomic--
Your future lover, nemesis, anonymous
ending is a little too (anti?)climatic?
5ed

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