Demons

bysusansnow©

Almost a fairy tale got my maidenhead ripped off
by a cowardly biker with no money for hamburgers
until Tuesday. Now waiting for the doctor the real
honest to goodness physician I knew I needed many
moons ago. We somehow managed to turn the clock
back twenty years and baby you look so good I need
something to happen to get those lips against these
lips I know you. I've known you for a long long time.
Let's fix the sorrow whoever you are today.

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by susansnow07/09/14

CDN

I really like writing without the ugliness and demands of pesky punctuation. I guess I like enjambments and how they can make a phrase do something unexpected. I prefer to write 'all in one breath' themore...

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by Cleardaynow07/09/14

Another really good one

Lots of evocative stuff.

Not too sure of the connect between first sentence, second sentence and thereafter. Suspect a full stop is needed after lips in the penultimate line - I read it that way anyway.

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