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My mind is filled with everything feminine
Things beautiful, soft, tender
The sweet shape of a tender breast, clothed in lace
Legs that seem to go on forever, smooth as silk
As I ponder the attraction of the feminine in my mind
I pause to wonder at the beauty which to me is inherent
In the female is everything I want to be with
And also everything I want to be
Soft and yet intense passion
Strong emotions, intuitive understanding
Sensitivity and a loving disposition
This is just part of what femininity means to me
Sweet dreams of love and intense passion
Of feeling silk against my skin
A passion for divine sublimation in the quest for love
This is being truly alive
I'm not an artist, but you are clearly conveying emotion which is more than enough for us! :)
You are right it is not a bad idea to make an ass of myself every so often because sometimes it is the quickest way for me to learn.
The important thing is for me to take time to learn the lessons to be had from it.
I don't like the term no pain no gain because it isn't always the case. But nothing ventured, nothing gained I think always applies. Note to self, will read more poetry.
you from the thread. Poetry. If you want to write it, read it. Easiest thing to do, go to the poems with comments that mention specifics, read the comments first, than the poem, agree? disagree? This merely gives you a clue as to what may be a problem area or an area that is especially noteworthy.
Good Luck
As far as making an ass out of yourself, if you don't from time to time, you just ain't trying. It's a good thing to do, like getting drunk every once and again. As a regular practice, I would advise against it.
Twelveoone thanks for your comment. I guess I was trying to imply an atmosphere of mystery and ambiguity, some form of ephemeral nature. In reality I have limited experience writing poems so far. I think I am on stronger ground with stories and articles, but I will continue to write poems and develop my technique. Thanks for giving my story a 5 by the way, I really appreciate that.
(the death card), don't worry personal quirk, 4th down, I just pay more attention to , I gave you a new writer 5, in a certain context this has a real strength, and "divine sublimation" has a whole different meaning. I am allowing for all that. I'll go with a simple suggestion, in the future try using more concrete nouns.