fucking haiku

Two twirling fingers

surrounding your G-spot are

releasing your nectar

Flaring my nostrils

and making me salivate...

You are so tasty!

there is a procedure, dismount ---un plug---turn around 180*,,,TK U MLJ V NV

Made stiff by haiku

My cock entered your wet cunt

To fill with hot cum.

Loved it. I wonder if what upset your '4-5-4' critic (below) is the fact that most haiku are descriptive or evocative of a scene rather a statement of someone's likes. It's the "I" that disconcerts. None of my business of course; I'm just a humble, unfrocked mathematician.

Hard maybe, well actually no maybe about it, fucking rock hard. However with all that slipping and dripping, there is no way it is abrasive.

I find this shorty very hard and abrasive, but that is most probably the taste that you wanted to create.

However a 5-7-5 syllable count does not a Haiku make, nor is it even a requirement.

To think I may have been devout to the art of haiku all these years and never, ever realized it before this poem! LOL!!! Within just a few words, you have evoked two elements that are priceless in life - laughter at the obvious, and well, the eroticism of the obvious! Short, sticky sweet <wink!> and to the point. I LOVED it!!!

not really haiku, more zappai, but it is hot. Watch for my review of Gabriel Rosenstock's book of erotic haiku, there are some examples in there where he combines nature with the erotic images with some stunning results. Let yourself get away from counting those 17 syllables... it's the images and phrasing that is more important.

A very hot, succinct poem.

jim : )

Whenever I can stop laughing long enough... chuckle... I'm sure I'm going to find it pretty hot.... heehee.. no, really... giggle...snort...

To write erotic and funny you sink to the lowest common

denominator. My vision of the top of your head while

I sit here drinking coffee is as erotic as one can get.

I wished you had saved this little beauty for a Monday

morning. You have sunk to a new low, congrats.