Gone Grey

bydemure101©

There was a time - there were a lot of times
when foolishly I though I would avoid
life's pains and pitfalls if I could but make

my private world within the garden wall
that drowned all intimations of the wrold
outside: my territory, my stronghold, far

from base intentions and the jealous hands
that wring your hours. Then I still believed
because I never thought. Instinctively

I shrank from reason and I stayed away
from anything untoward. I'd not hear
the wind nor feel the rain, and shut my eyes

to keep things rosy - till I woke to find
dull alternations of drear browns and greys
prevailing colours of my adult days.

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by DawnJ02/12/14

*sigh*

The poignancy of this hit me in the gut! These are my thoughts, my feelings...my wounds! Well done, my friend!

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by Oldbear6301/06/14

I don't think we ever let go

of the world we create like yours, Demure, and if we stay too long in one we get surprised. Long time ago I remember my mother saying "I look at my hands and see an old lady's hands, not mine." We needmore...

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by ishtat01/06/14

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I prefer this poem to many of your others because it seems felt rather than observed. Well written, Does the third stanza have some of its genesis in Othello?

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by Cleardaynow01/06/14

I think you should be very proud of this poem

I like this a great deal

Really like the flow, build up and the sentiment expressed. The irregular rhyming (no doubt there is a technical word for it) was striking. You had something worth saying andmore...

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by butters01/05/14

really liked the originality (to my eyes) of this phrase:

and the jealous hands that wring your hours

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