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Had I chosen
I could've seen the downward
spiral of my dream
in the pacifistic way
I decided to live
Hiding inside the box
and believing whatever
it spoke to me
- COMMENTS
champagne1982almost 16 years agoGood poem about the way a lot of people get trapped in their passive-aggressive way of approaching the failure of not achieving their dreams. A small suggestion that would make the poem better (for me, in my opinion) would be to cut even more extraneous words out of the truly important ideas and present them to us; condense the poem to its essence and you'll have a really powerful piece. Thanks for giving us your poem. This poem mentioned on the New Poems Review thread on Literotica's Poetry Feedback and Discussion forum. (Join us if you'd like to take part in challenges and some flirty discussion of writing and poems.)
