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Click hereI know he wants to take me while I bleed.
It is in his persistent comments
about moon cycles and
the ripe fruits of poetry
that drip red juice down his chin.
Submerged into his fantasy
of piercing me during my heaviest flow
cock surrounded by thick blood
god what it must feel like
to see himself coated
bayonet red.
And how better to approach this ideal
of fucking yourself right into a person
of forcing yourself right into another person
maybe through a spear wound,
through a laceration
straight into flesh.
I remember butchering day
the intimacy of slipping my fingers
through the bullet hole
into living flesh
or slipping into the slit throat
still warm
her feet roped and hooked
upside down
blood soaking into the shit and straw
under the overshoot.
Nerves sparked from fingertip
to a stinging in my breasts
burning between thighs and
a dull lump in my throat
trying to swallow itself.
Instead of lust we called it
exploration, science.
Down in Nana's basement
fingers would dig into the brain
as water ran over the severed head,
blood and mucus pouring from the nostrils.
My fingers entered them too
slipping the edge of cartilage
feeling the stretch and give deeper inside.
Always the fascination of a child,
wanting to get back inside
back inside something
surrounded, sustained.
Tonight I kneel like a wounded animal
and he stabs me over
over and harder forcing
the warm blood to run down my thighs.
His fingers paint my ass
with thick prints, belly
smudged with a thin layer
and red drops splatter the sheets
as he pierces into my wound
with everything, everything holy
and I scream
and beg
just kill me
fucking kill me
tears of relief
soak the cloth.
I was mesmerized by the imagery generated. Sure, I could have offered some critique, but my critical faculties were suspended.
-- succubi.t
Original
I don't know about the emjambment of the two lines with and at the end.
mns
maybe
I have said I loved the poem... I rate it as highly as possible, but it's too raw and honest to be loved, really.
It is stunning, breathtaking, and memorable...
Well done...
Intense is to puyt it mildly. This is sizzling poetry. And still, somehow tasteful and anything but hyperbolic. It takes skill and talent to balance there, and you do it so well.
It's very good. Vivid, intimate, confessional—shocking to many, I suspect.
But it seems a bit, what? Disorganized? Histrionic?
A little overlong, as well, I think.
You, more than anyone else I've read around here, have the ability to vividly portray personal emotional events in a way that makes them comprehensible to someone else and integrate disparate images into a thematic whole.
This is very good. With a little more control over the writing, I think it will be fantastic.
I too am speechless ... almost.
What vivid imagery !!! I can see and feel
it all just as you described, even smell ...
I was raised on a dairy farm, so this
is all to familiar.
AND ... Not many would just let it all
hang out, in tha face so to speak
the way you have here !!! Excellent
poetic passion ...