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Click hereEgyptian gallery. Amidst the wealth
of splendid sculpture, mummies, tombs and gold
a simple necklace held my eyes. It made
me long to take it from its case and drape
its blue and silver beads on naked skin
enhancing thus two beauties. But too long
one has been hidden from the world, too long
been out of reach. You have no truck with such
outlandish thoughts or feelings, with such things
impractical – and so the vision shifts
on my grey longing, like a worn-out jest,
to lose its shine upon a stranger’s breast.
clash, despite what they say about grey
You have no truck with such- assume you is self reference of the protagonist, this has the voice of a fussy old bat, again I would prefer the flutter of more lively words.
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For such love to go unrequited is heartbreaking! A beautiful evocation of one man's appreciation for and love of beauty.
I thought you were preparing me for something with "enhancing thus two beauties" for a later dramatic contrast, but I too am confused by the ending.
...my companion decided to hug all the Egyptian mummies - which made for some very grey looks from the custodians and we certainly lost the shine upon their strange breasts - smiles Sweet O.
I love the idea. I like the execution right up until the final stanza, where you lose me. I get the gist of what you are expressing, but don't understand why grey longing is a worn out jest, nor the strangers breast bit. Confused.
The Dark ,Unfathomed caves of Ocean bear !
Full many a Flower is born to blush Unseen ----
& waste it's Sweetness on the Desert air !"( sigh)
----- Thomas Grey , Elegy written in a Country churchyard